sixtysecondminute
ubw rookie
Joined: May 27, 2005
Location: Solihull, UK
Posts: 186
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| Posted: Tue Dec 19, 2006 7:34 pm |
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Lately I'm questioning the answers that you gave me,
To questions I asked you a long time ago,
Lately I'm noticing the lies that you raised me on,
Up and down through all the problems I faced.
You lay on your laurels and twisted my morals,
You said you knew best, and I trusted you,
You sculptured the lies, to look good in (y)our eyes,
In to the most attractive form you knew.
f**k you.
When I was reliant, and I was naive,
I trusted you when you said you knew best,
When I was in need, of somthing to believe,
I trusted you when you said you knew best,
I was reliant, I was naive,
I trusted you. You said you knew best,
I was in need, of somthing to believe,
I trusted you. You said you knew best,
You lay on your laurels and twisted my morals,
You said you knew best, and I trusted you,
You sculptured the lies, to look good in (y)our eyes,
In to the most attractive form you knew.
(f**k you)
You lay on your laurels and twisted my morals,
You said you knew best, and I trusted you,
You sculptured the lies, to look good in (y)our eyes,
In to the most attractive form you knew.
(f**k you)
You slept on your laurels and twisted my morals,
You said you knew best, and I trusted you,
You sculptured the lies, to look good in (y)our eyes,
In to the most attractive form you knew.
f**k you! |
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Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 152
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| Posted: Thu Jun 28, 2007 1:54 pm |
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"You lay on your laurels and twisted my morals"
I love this line, not really sre why. Is this a song or a poem? The only thing i can tink of to correct would be that it sounds a little bit redundant towards the end. I like how you chaged the last line to sleep in stead of lay. It switches it up but it still sonds repetitive. Oherwise it's really good. Good work 
-Aubrii |
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