"Lonely Luck"

Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 11:10 pm

Does anyone on these boards have a problem with loneliness? Currently, I don't have too many friends, because during the rough times I kind of dwindled all of them down, with the exception of a few. Two of those friends are long distance friendships, so I don't have much interaction in person with them. So, today I was a little down about this, and I ended up writing a new song. It's very different, because it's eventual format after completion was verse, short interlude (to be developed, but already envisioned), second verse, interlude (same one as before), a bridge, a longer interlude, and at the end, the chorus, followed by a revised version of that chorus. I've titled it, "Lonely Luck". Here are it's words:

"Lonely Luck"

I wait for the sound,
but the silence befogs me.
Without a doubt,
if a pin were to drop
I'd surely wonder
if my ears were fooling me.

Cause' it's been so long
since I,
heard my name, called out
by more,
than these few and far between.

(Short Interlude)

Here in this house
I feel like the only one.
I'm just a sprout
within the eyes of bugs. -Those,
wretched, hungry crawlers;
it is clear that they're eating me.

-And I've kept so strong.
Still I,
can't escape, the drought,
of hummingbirds.
Just like all, they have left me.

(Short Interlude)

(Bridge):
If ever, in time,
I have a chance,
I'll give it a spin,
and see if I can win...

(Longer Interlude)

(Chorus):
If it happens
I'll never let it go.
I'll rejoice,
with gratitude shown.
I'm counting my stars now,
and throwing coins into the wells.

(slightly revised Chorus):
If it happens
I'll never let it go.
I'll be ecstatic,
with gratitude shown.
I'm counting my stars now,
I'll keep throwing coins, into the well.

(repeats four times):
-into the well.

EnD

This is not an attempt to gain pity. I simply have no need for that. I get lonely at times, but I'm very happy for the most part. So, that is all for this post, and I've gotta' get off this machine, because one of my friends told me she was gonna' call around 1am, and I only have one phone line. You all take it easy.

Cheers and a smile, All!

RiCterMan

Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 3:12 pm

yeah, i think everyone's been lonely at some point, and this song is like therapy. i like it. except for the part about being eaten by bugs...but thats just cuz its a little creepy. lol.

Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 11:02 pm

LoL. -Understandable. -But did it grab your attention?

I was pretty much comparing myself, with symbolism, to something that isn't seen as much yet (like a sprout), and the bugs are symbolic of the emotions I feel due to little in the way of any friends. It's my fault, but it really sucks not to have many in my life right now. Thank you for the comment. It means a lot.

Posted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 9:45 pm

I love the strong use of symbolism and emotion here.

The last line realy catches me.

I realy feel for the way I get that you felt when writing this. I would love to hear it put to music... because I want to know if the melody I imagined with it is anything like that whih you intended.

I'll leave feedback on the rest soon dude. It's quarter to 5 and I have to be up early (for me anyway) tomorrow.

Keep writing. I realy notice your writing improving the more you post. You seem to realise what you do well and then develope it further with each new song.

I think that's what makes you such a good songwriter.

Peace out dude.
Tom Smile

Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 3:10 am

Thanks Tom. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Smile

Also, don't feel like you gotta' rush to reply. Whenever you can is cool. I just appreciate the fact that you reply at all. Later!

"Lonely Luck"

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