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chichasultan
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Joined: Jun 06, 2005
Location: Brussels, Belgium
Posts: 1
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| Posted: Mon Jun 06, 2005 2:15 pm |
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Hey everyone !! I'm new here!! I'm posting a song I made to see how people react ! Just to see if there's anything good or if it is crap, lool ! I hope not! I just want to say that i'm a french speaker so i'm sorry if I do grammatical mistakes. The song is called Blue eyed girl.
Like a naked flower
Going through the winter
She had a riot in her mind.
Why do you want him,
He's so disgusting ,
I don't understand this choice
He's only playing with you
But you can't see through
This shit love makes you blind
You were full of ideals,
You had an optimistic point of view
Now you sink in your own shit
And there is nothing you can do
But if I can help you
I will do
And if you need me
I'll see you soon
But if I can help you
I will do
And if you need me
I'll see you soon
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andyliverpool
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Joined: Jun 05, 2005
Location: liverpool
Posts: 10
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| Posted: Mon Jun 06, 2005 4:03 pm |
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thats not bad at all i like it bring a lyric writer myself i tend not to use swear words but if you like putting them in thats cool i think you have talent there and i think you could do better anyway nice little song |
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andyliverpool
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Joined: Jun 05, 2005
Location: liverpool
Posts: 10
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| Posted: Mon Jun 06, 2005 4:07 pm |
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anyway check my song out see what you think nice one 
Stars make the world go round
you know that voice inside your head at night
it gets louder by the way you feel
your heart stars to grow a little bit older
from the debt that you built
well am dreaming of the things we always wanted to say
well am dreaming of the things that never turn out right
didn't mean to blow your mind
take it as a dream dont blame the human kind
So when all the stars fall down on you
You can only see a different sun light
When are you going to make them pay?
For the dreams they stole from you
i bet you never do
so am taking a shower for the second time
to wash away all the stars from your easy life
you know this world is crazy
dont blame my lover
she never believed in me
So when all the stars fall down on you
You can only see a different sun light
When are you going to make them pay?
For the dreams they stole from you
i bet you never do
song written by mr aj illston
copyright 5/6/2005 |
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minusme
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Joined: Jan 25, 2004
Location: New York
Posts: 3648
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| Posted: Mon Jun 06, 2005 7:08 pm |
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Not bad chichasultan, I enjoyed reading your lyrics. I can certainly understand the feelings you describe in your lyrics, and they are simple and to the point.
Thanks for sharing!
Ron |
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