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trail_of_dead
ubw newbie
Joined: Apr 13, 2005
Posts: 8
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| Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 1:03 pm |
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I sealed your eyes in a jar,
And now i know,
How beautiful they are,
And I locked your heart up in a box,
So I could clean it out,
Just like I tried to clean the smoke out of your lungs
This is the song,
It sounds like the whistling of a falling bomb.
I sold your eyes,
I was running low on food,
When they were gone I couldn't recall your smile,
I held onto your heart as long as i could,
But mistakes are made,
I'd change the past if I could.
This is the song,
It sounds like the whistling of a falling bomb.
This is the song,
It reminds you why it all went wrong.
I sold your eyes,
They are beautiful,
They got a good price,
Your heart is pure,
Your so pure,
I wish I was good enough for you.
Always appreciate feedback. ^^ |
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minusme
Site Admin
Joined: Jan 25, 2004
Location: New York
Posts: 3700
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| Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 8:22 pm |
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Hi & Welcome to the Unsigned Band Web..
I really like your lyrics. They remind me of some bands I used to listen to. Some symbolism mixed in with some good old weird stuff, very nice!!!!
Great to have you here!
Ron |
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trail_of_dead
ubw newbie
Joined: Apr 13, 2005
Posts: 8
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| Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 8:30 pm |
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[quote="minusme"Great to have you here!
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 Thanks for welcoming me! It's great to see the site admin mingle with the members. Too many good sites have died out because the admin has slowly lost touch with the needs of his members.
Thank you for your opinion on my lyrics! It's greatly appreciated! ^^ |
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MerciPourLeAmore
ubw newbie
Joined: May 19, 2005
Location: Republican shithole , Texas, U.S.
Posts: 13
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| Posted: Fri May 20, 2005 4:36 pm |
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That's really nice- i like how it doesn't really give much away to what happened or what's really happening...
very gory, but good! :O |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Tue Jun 14, 2005 6:02 am |
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That was truly amazing. I work so hard in my lyrics to achieve this exact kind of imagery, and I just really think this is a great piece of art. I'm curious how long it took you to write it, because really... I love it. Now, before you say, "stop kissing my back side", I can assure you, I try to let people know it, when I see they've done a good job writing. You, my friend, have done it, and I've no need to do this, at all. I just know how good it feels to have your lyrics/writing acknowledged. So, that's all I have for ya now. Good, good...
Cheers and a Smile!
RiCterMan |
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