Feedback appreciated

Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 5:56 pm

Any feedback on this progressive metal song is appreciated!

Bound

This is my first attempt at vocals btw.

ubw rookie Joined: Sep 17, 2004 Posts: 149

I love the guitar tone! I also like the clean guitar in the dreak down. Good stuff. I can't really make out the vocals that much. Are you playing all the instruments?

Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 9:08 am

Hey, thanks for the comments! Yeah I still need to do some serious work on getting the vocals decently into the mix, work on my articulation etc Embarassed

..., but I'm pretty happy with them anyway, since this is the first song I've done with vocals, so I still have a lot of margin to improve. I play all the instruments besides the drums, which are loops, but the bass guitar is just an electric guitar with some pitch shifting effects on it.
Since you couldn't make out the vocals, and I doubt that others will be able to do so, here are the lyrics:

Who are you
your lies are so seductive
I am a part of you
don't use reason to try and defeat me

Rejection of reality
Just for some peace of mind

A senseless pursuit of desires unseen
Irrational hope
Mind numbing
Self sustaining
Self deception

An enemy within

How can you unveil what you hide from yourself
Irrational fear
The question to ask is which part of you rules
Can you trust yourself

Caught in a web spun out of nothingness
If you escape, you will fall

But after the fall, you can rise again
No longer shackled by yourself

Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 7:29 pm

agree the guitar tones are nice. some weird panning going on in places kindof catches me off guard. like some of the guitar harmonies

constructive criticism: mix seems a tad light in bass/bottom end imho. Overall I think the mix might deserve some tweaking, making the drums and bass a bit more present, maybe lower the guitars a tad in the mix. Right now the guitars are so out in front the drums seem somewhat small by comparison.

Posted: Sun Aug 19, 2007 4:56 am

Thanks for the comments! Yes I agree, the drums in this song are a bit dry and low in the mix. In my next song I am using different loops, with more bottom end (much better double bass sound) and higher quality, and I will heighten their volume in comparison to this song. I began making Bound with the other drum loops, and I had already written riffs that fitted over a few of those loops once I began to find out that the loops were not that great, so I was kind of stuck with them for the remainder of the song, because the difference in the sound of the loops was too much to suddenly change them in the middle of the song. Thanks for the helpful advice! Smile

Posted: Sun Aug 19, 2007 5:28 am

If you would like to listen to another song by me, I also have an older instrumental one:

Current

I've already heard comments on other sites, most people are not really happy with the distorted guitar tone (over saturated and fuzzy), and although I was kind of going for a wall of sound effect with that, the negative comments on the guitar sound were so overwhelming that I decided to change it in my newer song Bound (with apparently positive results, judging from your comments Smile

). This song is a bit more atmospheric and I think it has more depth than Bound (of course necessary since it doesn't have any vocals). Hope you enjoy!

Posted: Sun Aug 19, 2007 12:13 pm

I enjoyed the second tune.

the heavy guitar came in almost sounding like waves crashing. nice. I like that you kept the heavy fuzz guitar back some to keep it from overwhelming the other parts. clean guitar around 2:00 is nice.

this song sounds alot like it could be used in an opening chase scene in a movie. Visually it's kindof like boats racing, a shootout, something like that.

Posted: Fri Aug 31, 2007 10:24 am

I have uploaded my newest song on my page, it's called Mirage and I think it's better than my previous ones. Comments are much appreciated!

http://www.unsignedbandweb.com/beholder

moderator Joined: Jun 30, 2007 Posts: 399

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this have a savage taste , i like it but it's a bit slow for the moment, guitar could have more delay/echo voice signal is too dry, orchestration is good but not very powerfull i mean u choosed well the sounds but they do not follow this side of the this skill but i recognise the soft couple is very good with that echoe , remember before i'm a musician i were a listener a small public

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