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Tanganzinii
ubw newbie
Joined: Aug 08, 2006
Location: Georgia
Posts: 11
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| Posted: Sat Sep 09, 2006 1:31 pm |
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ok i wrote this on the long busride home from my first day of highschool...
its about me and my boyfriend and him sayin that we should take some time off and then when we tried to get back together it wasent the same becuase we both changed..PLLLEEEAASSEEE comment even if its harsh critisism 
“IN THE FIRST PLACE”
(verse1)
Wanna leave this place,
But I just can’t seem to find a door
Painfully accept the truth
I’m not that person anymore
(Bridge)
So let’s spend some time away
To make the heart grow
Fonder
So let’s spend some time away
To make the nights seem
Longer
Let us spend some time away
So at the end of the day
We’ll forget each other…
Anyways
(Chorus)
Watch us-
Beautifully drift away
Watch us-
Have nothing left to say
Watch you stumble
Watch me fade
And forget what mattered…
In the first place.
(verse2)
I look at your face
But I can’t see what I saw before
Painfully accept the truth
You’re not that person anymore
(Bridge)
So let’s spend some time away
To make the heart grow
Fonder
So let’s spend some time away
To make the nights seem
Longer
Let us spend some time away
So at the end of the day
We’ll forget each other…
Anyways
(Chorus)
Watch us-
Beautifully drift away
Watch us-
Have nothing left to say
Watch you stumble
Watch me fade
And forget what mattered…
In the first place.
Now it wasn’t my choice
To make you raise your voice
To make you
Lose all of those feelings
It wasn’t part of the plan
To let go of your hands
To make this
Lose all of its meaning
(Bridge)
So let’s spend some time away
To make the heart grow
Fonder
So let’s spend some time away
To make the nights seem
Longer
Let us spend some time away
So at the end of the day
We’ll forget each other…
Anyways
(Chorus)
Watch us-
Beautifully drift away
Watch us-
Have nothing left to say
Watch you stumble
Watch me fade
And forget what mattered…
In the first place. |
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Aubrii
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Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 151
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| Posted: Sat Sep 09, 2006 4:45 pm |
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love this, i couldn't help but make up a tune as i was reading it and sing allong with your lyrics lol |
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Tanganzinii
ubw newbie
Joined: Aug 08, 2006
Location: Georgia
Posts: 11
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| Posted: Sat Sep 09, 2006 8:39 pm |
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THANKS !!! I WANNA HEAR IT !!! lol .. really, i do.  |
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Aubrii
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Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 151
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| Posted: Sat Sep 09, 2006 9:04 pm |
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nope, sorry lol not gonna happen, no microphone #1, and #2 i usually don't let anyone hear me sing haha i'm shy  |
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Tanganzinii
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Joined: Aug 08, 2006
Location: Georgia
Posts: 11
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| Posted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 8:49 am |
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hehe ok |
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rubyrae413
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Joined: Mar 25, 2008
Location: NW suburb of Chicago
Posts: 1
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| Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 1:55 am |
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WOW!!! great lyrics, I have been clicking on so many links and they have either been too poetic to be in a song or they just suck. Your song is the first one that I could connect with and not have to change. In my first read through I composed the song. But I hope you don't mind that I gave it more of a country style. the phrasing of the lyrics and style of your words reminded me of something the Dixie Chics would sing. LOL. I won't make it too countryesque (is that a word?)As soon as I make a rough copy of this song, I will send it to you on a video player. then you can tell me if I suck or not. I will not be offended. And if you don't like it, I promise I won't use it. I'll probably get you the video by next week. One last thing... KEEP WRITING!
Please e-mail me so I know where to send the video
cray413@hotmail.com
or AIM
savedbygrace8413
Hope to hear from you
Christina Ray |
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busbyboy
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Joined: Jan 09, 2008
Location: Manchester
Posts: 5
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| Posted: Wed Mar 26, 2008 11:16 am |
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this is really good!
i can relate, i just wrote one a bit lyk this coz me and my girlfriend are in the same situation...
but i really lyk this, myt come up with something for it on guitar...
well done, and keep it up!
x |
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