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Aubrii
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Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 152
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| Posted: Fri Jul 07, 2006 9:30 pm |
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ahh, yes, a story in the form of a poem.....
Chapter one
The phone rings
for the thousandth time
she hears a beep
it's the other line
It's him again
for the thousandth time
she hears his voice
and one of his lines
"I love you baby"
"I swear i do"
she said, "get a life"
he said, "i live for you"
He begs again
For the millionth time
"give me a chance"
"I can change your life"
She shakes her head
for the millionth time
she bites her lip
and whispers goodbye
"don't hang up"
"stay on for a few"
she said, "i need to go"
he said, "i need you"
She cries again
yet another time
she can't seem to tell him
she's living a lie
He asks again
yet another time
"do you love me?"
and again she lies
"you know i can't"
"i told you i don't"
he said, "tell the truth"
she said, "i won't"
She hides it again
as she's done before
hidden so much
she can't hide anymore
he draws a heart
as he's done before
around him in chalk
and her name on the floor
"why can't you say it?"
"what's right and true"
she said, "I can't"
he said, "you can, I love you"
She pulls the phone away
once again
how can she say
what she's feeling within
He's ready to listen to her
once again
waiting for her
to say she loves him
"you know i do"
"i always have"
he said, "what's the matter?"
she said, "mom and dad"
She's been forbidden
forever it seems
to act her age
or follow her dreams
He's followed her
forever it seems
to make her aware
that he is her dream
yees....hahaha...now you must wait to see what becomes of them 
-Aubrii |
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minusme
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Location: New York
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| Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 11:28 am |
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Great job Aubrii! I really like the narrative style of this poem. I'm anxious to see the outcome!!  |
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abydynge_666
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Joined: Jul 08, 2006
Location: tx
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| Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 2:22 pm |
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WHY U DONīT WRITE SOME ... A LITTLE IN GORE STYLE?  |
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RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Mon Jul 17, 2006 2:14 am |
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I like this a lot. It kept my interest through to the end, and I too would like to eventually learn what happens to these two. Thanks for sharing it, and don't forget to post more of it. Later! |
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