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Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 151
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| Posted: Fri Jun 02, 2006 5:55 am |
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more "on the spot" lyrics. Let me know what you think. I need constructve crit please 
Verse1
Every time my heart breaks
I know it's just another teenage mistake
and everytime you kill me
i know it's a waste of your time
All these bad decisions
Haunting my teenage life
They only become
more pain on the side
Served with this entree of lies
chorus 2X
I get it, i know
I'm just an accident
waiting to happen
just a mistake
ready to be made
triping over every obstacle
true, but i fall well
leaning on every curve
depending on disaster
and i'm just the mistake you made
Verse2
Everytime you call me
i know it's just to say goodbye
and everytime you see me
i know it's just to see me cry
All the memories i have
Haunting my teenage life
They only become
more pain on the side
Served with this entree of lies
Chourus 1x
bridge
Won't you be glad
to know that you're rid of me
i know this was part of your plan
but everytime you kill me
it's a waste of your time
chorus 3x
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E2
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Joined: May 20, 2006
Posts: 44
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| Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2006 4:45 pm |
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that was better then your other song. Hey why can't you write anything uplifting? Not trying to tell you what to write just wondering. But keep doing what you're doing. |
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Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 151
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| Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2006 8:03 pm |
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i donno, i guess cause i'm usually in a bad mood when i write cause i use writing to vent. I'll try to write something uplifting....sometime  Sorry E2
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