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Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 151
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| Posted: Tue May 30, 2006 1:53 pm |
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yup, more on the spot writing. I'm still new at writting songs so i could use all the cunstructive crit. anyone can give. Thanks
Verse 1
Once again
you're leaning on
all the trust you have
for those that decieve you
and once again
you're holding on
to all the faith you have
in those who hurt you
Chorus x2
why do you
do this to yourself
why can't you
trust somebody else
you're doing this to yourself
Verse 2
Once again
you're depening on
all the croked men
who live to kill you
and once again
you've given in
and once again
you've been fooled
chorus
So why do you
do this to yourself
Why can't you
trust somebody else
bridge
Anyone else
could keep your secrets
and anyone else
is more dependable
Chorus 3x
You're doing this to yourself
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E2
ubw newbie
Joined: May 20, 2006
Posts: 44
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| Posted: Tue May 30, 2006 5:32 pm |
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Hey the song was good. Not my cup of tea but if was good for what it is. Were do you come up with these things? Well keep doing what your doing. |
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Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 151
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| Posted: Tue May 30, 2006 6:04 pm |
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haha, i donno where i come up with these things, i guess i just write when i'm venting or something and it just comes naturally. thanks for the comment
-Aubrii |
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TeaService
ubw newbie
Joined: Jun 03, 2006
Location: Saskatoon, Saskatchewan, Canada
Posts: 4
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| Posted: Sat Jun 03, 2006 12:12 pm |
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Most of the lines were pretty cliche, but I still sorta liked it. Not different from anything else out there, but still good. Keep on writing! |
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