Eve of the Nine Kings (lyrics)

Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 2:33 pm

A bell resounds, my dreams abound
With sundered sights and vexing sounds
Erratic sleep; my conscience bleeds
A squalid mire of stale debris

The wraith it came the night before
O'er the lane and through my door
On its grating breath, a note it bore
A note just like the night before

"Arise from sleep", it spoke to me
with dripping tongues and gaping teeth
"The eve is nigh, the time is near,
look to the sky in seven years.
The sea will rise, the earth will heave
the kings of nine will downward sweep
On thrones of porous ivory,
the heads of men under their feet."

"A dream, no doubt", I thought aloud
Patting sweat atop my brow
Relieved to be awake and free
Of horrid dreams and restless sleep

I rubbed my eyes but trembled for
I found a pair of gaping sores
Affright, I yelled a ghastly roar
I dug them out the night before

Here's an MP3 of the song

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DAMIAN SCOTT
Vocals for IMPURITY
http://www.impurityband.com/

ubw rookie Joined: Aug 21, 2005 Posts: 152

"I rubbed my eyes but trembled for
I found a pair of gaping sores
Affright, I yelled a ghastly roar
I dug them out the night before"

ok....what? ok so this i what i got from this verse, you tell me if it's right or not.

you woke up and found bite marks? and then yelled cause that'd be weird, and then what the heck are you digging up? i don't get it. Sorry, i like the poem, don't get me wrong. In fact, up until this point you had me in a trance. But this ending just needs a little tweeking so people can understand it better i think. Please take this as both a complement and constructive crit.

-Aubrii

Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 4:08 pm

Well... I thought it was pretty clear...
1) "I rubbed my eyes but trembled for" = I went to rub my eyes, but started shaking because....

2) "I found a pair of gaping sores" = When I went to rub my eyes (see 1st line), I found 2 open wounds/gaping sores

3) "Affright, I yelled a ghastly roar" = Scared, I yelled and screamed

4) "I dug them out the night before" = I remembered/realized I dug my eyes out last night

This guy is obvsiously caught in a half sleep half waking state.... hence the hallucinations and vivid dreams, so it shouldn't be a surprise that he'd dig his eyes out if he keeps seeing a monster in his bedroom saying crazy shit to him. Haha. Anyway... if you didn't notice, the poem is heavily influenced by Poe. It's one of the better ones I've written for my band...

Actually, you can see the rest of them here:
http://www.impurityband.com/fulllengthlyrics.html

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DAMIAN SCOTT
Vocals for IMPURITY
http://www.impurityband.com/

ubw rookie Joined: Aug 21, 2005 Posts: 152

Ok, see i thought that when he rubbed his eyes he was waking up from the dream he was having and when you said gaping sores i remembered that that's how you described someones teeth "with dripping tongues and gaping teeth" So i thught maybe you meant that you woke up and found that the thing that was talking to you in your dream left his marks by biting you. ok i get it now thanks. That would explain why i didn't get the digging part. Embarassed

-Aubrii

Posted: Sat Jun 03, 2006 12:15 pm

Brilliant. It was out there, it was beautiful and it painted an awesome picture. Absolutely beautiful. I highly suggest you continue writing these types of pieces in the future, we need artists who don't write the generic "you broke up with me, I'm so sad" type of songs. Again, beautiful. Very Happy

Posted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 8:02 pm

Hey... I got what you were going for with that last part. I must say, you did a great job and more. -You say this was influenced by Poe? That's kinda' cool, because as I was reading it, it was "like Poe" to my eyes. Wink

-Very well written, and I think you have a gift. Later, you!

--RiCk->*

Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 10:02 am

Thanks. Although, my stuff is nowhere near the same caliber as Poe. I just read The Raven again yesterday, and that is just sheer genius. It's almost discouraging. Hah!

But I'm glad you liked this one. It's layed out a lot more "lyrical" than I would've liked, but then again.... it was written to be song lyrics.

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DAMIAN SCOTT
Vocals for IMPURITY
http://www.impurityband.com/

Posted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 6:10 pm

Yeah... Poe is near unreachable, with how well he created his works. It's intriguing to know that he was drunk a lot of the times that he wrote. lol. (-not that I'm degrading who he was.) His works are one of my bigger inspirations, even though he wrote poems. Lyrics and poems are one in the same, as they both deal with the beautiful arrangement of words. Later!

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