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guitargeekfreak
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Joined: May 07, 2006
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| Posted: Mon May 08, 2006 7:02 pm |
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THROWN AWAY
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
you will never convince me
never again
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
iv givin it up
all thrown away
todays the night
tonights the day
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
you will never convince me
never again
[This song is about me getting rid of some bad habits, and never going back to them.]
© 2006 Music of the High |
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Aubrii
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| Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 7:46 am |
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"iv givin it up " donno if it's a typo or not, but "iv" is spelled " i've" just thought i'd let you know. Good job otherwise. Is this a song or a poem?
-Aubrii |
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guitargeekfreak
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| Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 7:14 pm |
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its a song, and i know how to spell "I've", i just typed it up really quickly, thnx for the comment |
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Aubrii
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| Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 7:50 pm |
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yeah i fifured i was just making sure  |
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Aubrii
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| Posted: Wed May 10, 2006 6:52 am |
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Kinkyfriend85
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Joined: Feb 16, 2005
Location: sweden
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| Posted: Wed May 10, 2006 9:03 am |
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| guitargeekfreak wrote: | THROWN AWAY
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
you will never convince me
never again
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
iv givin it up
all thrown away
todays the night
tonights the day
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
todays the night
tonights the day
i will never
forever i will never
you will never convince me
never again
[This song is about me getting rid of some bad habits, and never going back to them.]
© 2006 Music of the High |
Here's some fixes (No offense, this is how I think it should be like)
THROWN AWAY
Today is the night
And the day that
I will never and ever
Be convinced by you
Ever again..
Today is the night
And the day that
I will never and ever
Be convinced by you
again
I have given up
All has been thrown
Away
Today is the night
And the day
Today is the night
And the day that
I will never
And ever..
Today is the night
And the day that
I will never and ever
Be convinced by you
Ever again
And here's more like how I would write a text about what you wrote ( I take it for that it's about throwing away an ex girlfriend/Boyfriend):
Thrown Away
Tonight, all have been lost tonight
I've thrown it all away, and I will never
Have it with me again, thrown away
And I never want to find it again
Going through the pain
Never going to convince me again
No spoken words, all was just a game
So tonight, I will say farewell and
Throw you away
I say,
Tonight, all have been lost tonight
I've thrown it all away, and I will never
Have it with me again, thrown away
And I never want to find it again
Going through the pain
Never going to convince me again
It's all just a game for you
Only you wanted to gain
So,
Tonight I must leave you alone
I must go on
I say,
Tonight, all have been lost tonight
I've thrown it all away, and I will never
Have it with me again, thrown away
Tonight
Feel free to use this text for whatever you want to, as you did the original. Oh and a tip, try not make a new thread for every new songtext you write |
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guitargeekfreak
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Joined: May 07, 2006
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| Posted: Wed May 10, 2006 7:49 pm |
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[to kinkyfriend] ok first of all, ur version sux, it dosnt make any since at all, u need to practice more on writing be 4 u start trying to help or giving out advice to other people about songs/poetry, this song(thrown away), i meant to write it the way i wrote it cuz it sounds out of the ordianary and ppl can still get the message i inted out of it, by the way, this song is not about a girl, its just about never going back to the old ways i used to live, thats all it is, my advice to u, PRACTICE MORE AND DONT GIVE UP
-Scott |
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Aubrii
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Joined: Aug 21, 2005
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| Posted: Fri May 19, 2006 7:47 am |
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| guitargeekfreak wrote: | [to kinkyfriend] ok first of all, ur version sux, it dosnt make any since at all, u need to practice more on writing be 4 u start trying to help or giving out advice to other people about songs/poetry, this song(thrown away), i meant to write it the way i wrote it cuz it sounds out of the ordianary and ppl can still get the message i inted out of it, by the way, this song is not about a girl, its just about never going back to the old ways i used to live, thats all it is, my advice to u, PRACTICE MORE AND DONT GIVE UP
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Kinky, good effort thanks for trying to help. Guitar, i think you have a point but i think you could've been nicer about it. Saying her work sux isn't exactly constructive. You did giver her good advice though so thank you |
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guitargeekfreak
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| Posted: Tue May 23, 2006 6:02 pm |
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yea, i was kind of having a bad day, my grades were bad and parents were freaking out so i got angry, srry kinky friend, but yes u still need to work on ur own stuff be 4 u tell ppl how things should be |
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Aubrii
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| Posted: Tue May 23, 2006 6:06 pm |
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