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free2playhappy32
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Joined: Apr 25, 2006
Posts: 4
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| Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 5:38 pm |
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Alright... so please tell me what you think about this song i wrote...
Truly
Am I a little too hard on u
Is it too good to be true
That I do…. I do…..
I love u
Is anything goin wrong
Am I goin insane?
Is something wrong…wrong..
Wrong with my brain
Thought we were only gonna be friends
But I guess that all had to change… in the end
Am I awake?
Or am I dreamin
U love me and I love u
Somethings gotta give
I know this cant be true
But ohh I think it is
I think I truly love u
We’ve been friends
Ever since preschool
Nothins changed
Nothins ever went wrong
But now theres a twist
I want to see you all night long
Thought we were only gonna be friends
But I guess that all had to change… in the end
Am I awake?
Or am I dreamin
U love me and I love u
Somethings gotta give
I know this cant be true
But ohh I think it is
I think I truly love u |
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free2playhappy32
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Joined: Apr 25, 2006
Posts: 4
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| Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 5:47 pm |
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shes-a-killer
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Joined: Apr 24, 2006
Posts: 3
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| Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 8:01 pm |
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I thought it was okay, but i dont know how you have this in your head.. it flowed "okay" it had some good, and some rough spots in it.. my favorite part was..
-U love me and I love u
Somethings gotta give
I know this cant be true |
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coolguyguy
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Joined: Feb 23, 2005
Location: manteca CA.
Posts: 15
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| Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 11:10 am |
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I I like the song but itàs missing a ceritin thing that makes it stand out. All and all it was good |
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E2
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Joined: May 20, 2006
Posts: 44
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| Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 1:09 am |
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it was good. my fav part was the first part. all in all it was ok. keep doing what you're doing |
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Aubrii
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Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 152
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| Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 5:36 am |
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hmmmm...i'm confused as to how you would make ths work in a song because your lyrics don't correspond with eachother, like, in the first half you have places where you repeat things "wrong wrong" "I do I do" you know, but in the second half there's none of that, it's just straight forward. And is there a reason that the first verse is split into three different parts and the second only has one?
first verse-
"Am I a little too hard on u
Is it too good to be true
That I do…. I do…..
I love u
Is anything goin wrong
Am I goin insane?
Is something wrong…wrong..
Wrong with my brain
Thought we were only gonna be friends
But I guess that all had to change… in the end"
second verse-
"We’ve been friends
Ever since preschool
Nothins changed
Nothins ever went wrong
But now theres a twist
I want to see you all night long
Thought we were only gonna be friends
But I guess that all had to change… in the end "
The layout's just a bt different that's all. You probably have it all figured out in your head though.
I really like this part "Thought we were only gonna be friends
But I guess that all had to change… in the end"  it's cute
well hope that helped
-Aubrii |
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