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shes-a-killer
ubw newbie
Joined: Apr 24, 2006
Posts: 3
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| Posted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 9:07 pm |
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Go ahead and blame me for this tonight
Because I know when tomorrow comes
You'll sell your apology and say I was right
You've done it all to many times before
And I'm getting tired of this open wound
You misread me
Mislead me, abused me
And misused me
You tore open my heart
Right before me
To show me
How much you hurt me
If I could, I would save you from death
It would be like that perfect magic movie ending
Where everything was silent except for your breath
That crept over me and stole the words from me
As I knew I couldn't be with you, because of you
You misread me
Mislead me, abused me
And misused me
You tore open my heart
Right before me
To show me
How much you hurt me
And Its over now
This romantic tragedy
Could never be
Just you and me
- if you took the time to read it, atleast leave me a comment about how you liked it, didnt like it, or what i could have done better... |
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minusme
Site Admin
Joined: Jan 25, 2004
Location: New York
Posts: 3653
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| Posted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 9:34 pm |
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I like your timing and the subject matter is very interesting.
My favorite line is: | Quote: | | Where everything was silent except for your breath |
Really enjoyed these! |
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coolguyguy
ubw newbie
Joined: Feb 23, 2005
Location: manteca CA.
Posts: 15
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| Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 12:02 pm |
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I thought it was preety cool I really like the chours. |
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guitargeekfreak
ubw newbie
Joined: May 07, 2006
Posts: 23
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| Posted: Sun May 28, 2006 4:11 pm |
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this song/poem is amazing, especially this part
You misread me
Mislead me, abused me
And misused me
You tore open my heart
Right before me
To show me
How much you hurt me
And Its over now
This romantic tragedy
Could never be
Just you and me
it has such a great timing to it, and it just draws the reader into it, AMAZING PROPS TO YOU, KEEP UP THE AMAZINGLY AWSOME WORK! |
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