RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 7:34 pm |
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I just tried to post these, but it disconnected me. Anyway, it's title is "Meatbone", and I don't feel like explaining what it's about... It wasn't fun to write, so... I wrote it yesterday, and here's what I got to share...
"Meatbone"
-RiCk, "RiCterMan," Strayer, fecit.
Thank you for that "lashing out,"
so undeserved,
and worth the while.
-Tearing me from calm,
and shoving me down like a meatbone,
in an overgrown garbage can.
I never had the intention of making a mess.
But I couldn't avert you from throwing, myself into a spin.
(Chorus):
You pinned me down(!).
I didn't struggle(!).
My one response was compliance...
-And so you glared(!),
as I stayed there(!),
until my mind turned unto me, in defiance.
(Next part repeated 3 more times):
I didn't disagree.
I ad-mit-ted my wrong.
-No argument,
sent forth- No reason
to render that neccessary.
(Short Interlude, envisioned.)
(Chorus)
(Repeat 1st verse)
I never had the intention to make a mess.
But I couldn't avert you from throwing
all of it away.
(Chorus)
(Next part repeated 2 more times):
I didn't disagree.
I ad-mit-ted my wrong.
-No argument,
sent forth- No reason
(Next line repeated 2 more times):
to render that neccessary...,
and your way was unneccessary...
You lost control.
I did as well,
but I regained...
Thanks for bringing back, the pain.
EnD
It's probably obvious that I've been experimenting with the way I write, over the last couple days or so... Criticisms are welcome, as always. Later, everyone... |
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