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Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 152
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| Posted: Tue Apr 11, 2006 5:33 pm |
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Reality
slumber
tonight we sleep
because being conscious is over rated
dream
revealing our desires
because this alternate reality called life is boring
wait
paitience is key
becuse waiting is just another word for hoping
so tonight
tonight i'll sleep
i'll dream concealed plots
only to be defined as hopeful
I'll wait for you in these dreams of mine
because together our dreams become reality |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 8:11 pm |
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I like this. It's, I dunno'..., pretty, I guess. lol. The fact is that I enjoyed it, but I got somethin' else to say about it too. I'll send ya' a PM, 'cause I don't wanna' post it here, and seem like some kind of asshole. -nothin' meant to be mean, but it's possible it could seem so. Nice job here! Later...! |
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free2playhappy32
ubw newbie
Joined: Apr 25, 2006
Posts: 4
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| Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 5:46 pm |
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i must say... as a song this is awful... just horrible but i didnt think of it as a poem... it might be good as a poem but i've not and will not look into it
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Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 152
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| Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 12:58 pm |
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um, yeah it's deffinatly not a song. Next time you post something like that please explain why you feel that way so that i may improve, thank you |
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E2
ubw newbie
Joined: May 20, 2006
Posts: 44
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| Posted: Tue May 30, 2006 10:39 pm |
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It was ok not your best but still ok. I wish you had more to it. But like I said it was ok. |
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