"Only Chance" (lyrics)

Posted: Sat Mar 25, 2006 2:52 am

Hey people...,

I wrote something new today... It's called "Only Chance". I don't know whether or not anyone cares, 'cause no one seems to reply anymore. But oh well. I also don't mean to sound pissed off or anything. I honestly feel fine right now... See..., I just like to recieve feedback, 'cause as a writer, it lets me know what I need to improve...

Anyway...., this is about just general appreciation for the life I've been given. I'm not satisfied with where I am right now (as far as status goes), but what I have appreciation for is all of it, from birth until death. So, that's the subject matter for this. Later, everyone.

"Only Chance"
-Rick, "RiCterMan," Strayer, fecit.

If I never had the chance to breathe again,
to feel the air, in place, around my skin,
or to feel rebirth, in waking to new days; morning grins,
I would be nothing but many chances missed.

(Pre-Chor.):
So, I am grateful.
-forever grateful,
for this life.

(Chorus):
-'Cause this is the only chance I've got,
to live.
This is the only chance...
This is the only chance I've got,
to live.
This is the only chance...
-Accepted.

If I never had the chance to stretch a smile,
to travel along, leaving footsteps over miles,
or to taste all flavors, to be savored, through my time,
all would be unknown, with the fiction of my design.

(Pre-Chor.)

(Chorus)

(Short Interlude, envisioned.)

If I never had this chance,
and I had a way to take a glance,
I'd surely hope it was granted.
For this, I would. For this, I would...

(Double Chorus, w/last line omitted, first time through.)

(Interlude fade-out, envisioned.)

EnD

ubw newbie Joined: Mar 20, 2006 Location: Ct Posts: 12

first of all, i totaly agree about people not putting up advice, writers need views on their writing from others since its people who we are trying to get lyrics across to, its the point of this whole website- forum dammit!! Well any ways, I think the songs pretty good overall, its just the ryhming that gets to me, its not that i don't rhyme in songs i write, its that i try not to have them ending in the same rhyme two lines in a row, like,"Its time" , 'A mime" but what i do like is when the words rhyme but without the words looking the same, like when u used "time" and "design" even tho they were right next to each other i think it flowed better in writing, so just try to stick to that and i think its good (its ok if u do rhyme tho, its your music, do what u want)

ubw newbie Joined: Apr 01, 2006 Posts: 14

i like this alot. the repetition in the chorus is pretty kewl. A recording of this would be sweet, do you have one?

Posted: Sat Apr 08, 2006 5:00 am

Guitarhead: Thanks for the reply, man... Smile

I just gotta' say one thing, for clarification's sake.... I write my lyrics the way that they come out. Most of the words I write aren't written in what, in poetry, would be an a, a, a, a, rhyme scheme. I basically write to how it's supposed to sound vocally, and if rhyming each line like that at the end, does work, that's when I do. It's just not common in most of my lyrics. You could call this one kind of an oddball. lol. Later!

UKQ: Thanks for the feedback. Smile

I don't have any kind of recording, because I honestly am in bad need of musicians... I've said this before on here, but ya' probably didn't see it, 'cause it says you're new to the site. I need a P.A., and probably a newer, higher quality mic' too, and then I can start looking for some talent. I'm glad you liked this though. Thanks again. Later!

"Only Chance" (lyrics)

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