Aubrii
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 21, 2005
Posts: 151
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| Posted: Sat Mar 11, 2006 5:16 pm |
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never again will i see your lovely face
never again will i listen to your voice
my ears devouring every word
that escapes your mouth
forever wishing to be with you again
forever wishing i could mend the broken
every mistake and every flaw
permenatly etching themselves into our lives
For all the wilted petals and all the mangled lies
for all the regrets and all unspoken goodbyes
tonight is the last time and the first time
to see what could've been
A final chance to sew this friendship together again
a final chance to make amense
we exchange a look of sorrow for a look of pain
never again, never again, will i see your lovely face
haven't written on here in a while, i hope to start again, so here's my first attempt. Hope you like it. it doesn't have a tittle, i'm not good at naming things
-Aubrii |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Sun Mar 12, 2006 5:53 pm |
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Hi Aubrii,
I liked what you wrote here... It's not the best I've seen, but it's really nice. Plus, it's not important that it's not the best, or whatever. That's why we, as writers, write... -to improve, and keep trying to improve. Thanks for sharing.  Later! |
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