"Fire and Ashes"

Posted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 12:54 am

It's been quite a while since I shared anything in here, but I just finished these lyrics less than a few minutes ago. Hopefully, they'll be enjoyable to some.

“Fire and Ashes”
-Rick, "RiCterMan," Strayer, Fecit.

I watch smoke come out your window...
Could it be that you’re on fire...?
Maybe not, but I sure hope so...,
‘cause I’ve been burning for a while, and you sparked the flames...

(Chorus):
You always let it grow.
-Spraying the gasoline, as you wish for me to explode.
So I wait for you to glow
red, orange, and yellow.
-Rest as ash; fall below.

Oh, the smoke twists like your black soul...,
poisonous like your desires...
My life was at your disposal...
I was flammable. Still you smiled, and set me ablaze...

(Chorus)

(Short Interlude, envisioned)

(Words to Bridge):
The furious rising
of all of the heat, deep inside me
couldn’t escape beyond my head,
and in my brain, I ignited...

I stomp on me.
I stomp on me...
but I, cannot extinguish
myself.
You won’t let me.

(Revised Chorus):
You only help it grow...
-Spraying the gasoline, as your torch gives you all control.
How I wish that you could know
red, orange, and yellow,
and the depths, down below.

(Outro):
I watch smoke come out your window...
Maybe you’re not on fire...;
maybe it’s just a hollow...
illusion, or me...

EnD

This one has some complicated symbolism involved. The general idea is based on the effects someone has had on me over many years, and how those effects are now causing me to question some parts of reality. It was inspired by thoughts of a phone call from that "wonderful" person, which I recieved within the last few days... Take care, everyone. Later.

Posted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 11:26 am

that's good Rick, I enjoyed the way you describe that burning passion. . .
Good job man! . . . .

I have a song called "Burning Desire" and it's somewhat about what you wrote here, except it's an instrumental and I'm trying to convey those emotions through music only.....

Peace,
Erick. . . . .

Posted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 3:25 pm

Oh no, man... This isn't about a burning passion. It's about a relative who's caused a lot of emotional harm for me, and it's me saying, "I've been hurting for a long time, and I wish you could feel that hurt." There's also some weird symbolism that was meant to portray confusion over what I see and think. -Like the outro is saying, "I'm seeing this, but maybe this isn't real, and my mind is somehow warped (or partially dead). Maybe the smoke is being seen, because the person has finally caused that to be, and I'm just seeing it, without the mentality I once had." I guess an easier way to explain what that means, is the thought of, "Maybe I'm losing, or have lost, my mind."

That all sounds depressing as hell, and yeah, it does suck..., but it's more of confusion that I feel, than a sense of dread. See, I used to think a certain way about this person, and other family members, but now I'm not sure what to think about these people. It's like, I don't think I'm crazy, but if everything I thought was true is really false, than I don't know what to think. I'm gonna' be just fine, though. Smile

The issue is just finding a way to sort everything out.

By the way... I'm glad ya' enjoyed the words, man. -Hope others will as well. Take care. Later!

ubw rookie Joined: Jun 28, 2005 Posts: 133

i really like this. cant really explain why but it just has good flow and good imagry/symbolysim.

keep it up

Posted: Wed Dec 07, 2005 4:54 pm

This is a very emotional piece. Highly charged with anger.
Just to clarify, passion is any sort of strong emotion such as love, anger or hate etc, so guitarman was right in describing your emotions of anger and confusion as "burning passion".
It is my opinion that you should know the meaning of the word someone uses before you disagree with their choice of words.
No disrespect intended, man.
Nice work.

Posted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 12:21 pm

Thanks, Chase. I'm glad you enjoyed this.

Opt. Delus.: No offense was taken by your comment. I agree with that opinion, and I admit I made an error with thinking correctly about the meaning of passion. I'm not sure why I zeroed in on just one meaning of passion, but at the same time, I hope Eric knows that I wasn't tryin' to be rude with that reply. Wink

Anyway, I'm glad you guys liked it. Later, everyone!

Posted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 12:38 pm

in the chorus.

Question, did these wrods just come to you or did you have to sit and think about them. If this is pure on the moment stguff, loved to know how you do it.

Posted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 11:33 pm

Hey Will. I'm glad ya' liked this one.

When I write, I always sit and think about it, but it's kind of a mix of thinking shit up and the words comin' naturally. The idea or theme of the lyrics usually takes the most thinking, and the rhyme usually just comes out on it's own. Medaphors are usually pretty easy to create, but there have been numerous times where I've been writing, and it would take up to an hour or more to come up with one that I feel is good. This one took around 35 minutes, to an hour, from start to finish. Anyway, I'll shutup now. Later, man!

"Fire and Ashes"

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