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Bullet41
ubw rookie
Joined: May 22, 2005
Location: Bracknell
Posts: 120
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| Posted: Sun Dec 04, 2005 3:52 pm |
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Dear ???,
I'm headbanging all the way,
it might explain what i can't say.
we are so old but our love is so young,
this might help us too carry on.
Lets go back to the basics,
( we might learn all the things we never knew. )
lets go back and save it,
( i might just be brave enough to say i love you. )
I'm stage diving all over the place,
hoping to dive stright through your face.
i'm opening my eyes,
but i'm still blind.
Lets go back to the basics,
( we might learn all the things we never knew. )
lets go back and save it,
( i might just be brave enough to say i love you. )
I lied i never loved you,
i lied i never loved you.
I never wanted too learn,
i never wanted too learn.
This was all a joke i hope you die at night. |
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sixtysecondminute
ubw rookie
Joined: May 27, 2005
Location: Solihull, UK
Posts: 186
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| Posted: Sun Dec 04, 2005 7:15 pm |
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With the exception of the last line, I can safely say this is the best song I have ever writen by you. Your writing has improved alot since you first started posting here, and that could not be more evidant in this song.
In terms of being constructive, as I already said... the last line, and also perhaps you could try 'lets get back to basics', rather than 'lets get back to the basics'. Other than that... briliant work.
I realy hate to end on a negative though... especially when I actually realy like the song, so I'm going to copy and paste my first paragraph in at the end 
With the exception of the last line, I can safely say this is the best song I have ever writen by you. Your writing has improved alot since you first started posting here, and that could not be more evidant in this song.
Keep it up dude  |
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Bullet41
ubw rookie
Joined: May 22, 2005
Location: Bracknell
Posts: 120
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| Posted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 2:07 pm |
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Thanks for the comments dude.
I just came back from hard times so i decided to write a song.
It wasn't meant to be a real song, just me messing about tring to piss people off, as you see in the last line.
But thanks for what you said and i will try to write more songs like this.
But even better. |
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sixtysecondminute
ubw rookie
Joined: May 27, 2005
Location: Solihull, UK
Posts: 186
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| Posted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 4:41 pm |
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Hurry up and get some recordings done! |
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Bullet41
ubw rookie
Joined: May 22, 2005
Location: Bracknell
Posts: 120
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| Posted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 4:48 pm |
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| theblacks wrote: | | Hurry up and get some recordings done! |
Haha don't worry we will. Prepare for some f**king good music. Early next year we should post some finished songs right here at UBW. Its really good and if you like Dark/Punk/Emo you should like, or even love our band. Thats a promise.
Ps: read my new song called Every Porn Is Creepy/E.P.I.C |
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