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artificialsweetener
ubw newbie
Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 9:25 pm |
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its kind of dark...just something i wrote when i was in a bitchy mood...i'm almost ashamed for writing it lol....but i like how it turned out...
i've never been a jealous person
but she begged for it from the first glance
i tried to hold this back
but she never had a chance
his ice blue eyes spoke forever to me
actions so accidentally woven to deceive
he wrapped his arms around me and whispered
that i make everything make sense
but i could read his mind and it was still
fixated on the girl in the black lace dress
oh so f**king impressed
i'm always second best
best friends forever
its so hard to remember those childhood years
and i can say without a shadow of doubt
that she never meant to cause these tears
but envy made me ugly
and i'll make her imperfect somehow
best friends forever
but there's a gun in my hand now
i've never been a jealous person
but she could never understand the way i love him
and he could never really see me
as long as shes there, making his head spin
none of this was ever really her fault
but he is my wound and she is the salt
and i'm driven into a twisted state of mind
i'm strangely compulsive as i walk through her door
just like so many other times
but my intentions are different than ever before
i'm so sick of being ignored
now shes lying on the floor
beauty was her blessing and
beauty was her curse
this jaded sort of envy was mine
and hers just made mine worse
he gave me the gun but i guess he never figured
that i could really stand before her and pull the trigger |
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hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Tue Nov 29, 2005 4:18 pm |
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holy shit.
thats all I have to say. this was so good, i got chills when I read it. im not really sure what else to say with out it totaly sound like im kissing your ass.
I loved these lines
"his ice blue eyes spoke forever to me "
"none of this was ever really her fault
but he is my wound and she is the salt"
anyway amazing job.
if you haev time check this out for me,
http://www.unsignedbandweb.com/ftopict-6483.html |
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