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over-drive
ubw newbie
Joined: May 22, 2005
Location: Rotherham
Posts: 30
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| Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2005 3:34 pm |
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I wrote this song but i wasnt feeling like this
Will i ever fit in
When will you stop trying to understand
you will never understand the pain im feeling
deep inside but i will never show you
i will always keep it hidden from you all
no-one to turn to now no-one to save me now
Will i ever fit in with you
i'm lost here again but
i have felt this millions of time
but never this bad this is it
you all ignore me pretending
i dont exist i screem again..
If i where to go right now would anyone notice
and if they did would they even care at all
i see the knife shining on the side i begin to toy
with the idea of leaving this world once and for all
i stumble thinking is this realy what "I" want
Will i ever fit in with you
i''m lost here again but
i have felt this millions of time
but never this bad this is it
you all ignore me pretending
i dont exist i screem again..
Why will no one ever let me speek
slowly i fade just like i'm a ghost
as i feel the end near me closer
nothing left to hold me up so i fall
i need someone out there to save me
Will i ever fit in with you
i''m lost here again but
i have felt this millions of time
but never this bad this is it
you all ignore me pretending
i dont exist i screem again.. ©
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hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Mon Nov 21, 2005 12:53 am |
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| Quote: | | nothing left to hold me up so i fall |
for some reason that is my favorite line. over all its ok, could use some work. |
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over-drive
ubw newbie
Joined: May 22, 2005
Location: Rotherham
Posts: 30
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| Posted: Thu Nov 24, 2005 6:44 am |
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i know it needs a lot of work but im not sure where to start.
If it was your song what would you change? |
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