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SaveYourSoul
ubw newbie
Joined: Nov 10, 2005
Posts: 30
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| Posted: Fri Nov 11, 2005 6:56 pm |
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This is a differant kind of song that I wrote here its a little softer musically but lyrically just as hard if you aske me. Check it out.
Look at those
tight jeans
glossy lips
she is swinging those hips
side to side
the girl compares
to no one
Jus to think
return back Jake
she is our of your league
she gives you a wink (who me)
this girl could bring you
to one knee
I am starting to blush
she chuckles
like your high school crush
All chocked up
only thing i can say
your my godess
i just want to take you away (my princess)
hurry rush
get her number
so you can take her away (my princess)
Standing there blankly
I dont want to come off as a typical guy
Buy her a drink
just dont think
keep the flow
I am even getting more nervous
walking
tip toeing
Every second becomes
slow and slow
I just want to go home
but i cant
i need to say
I know she is the one
She is my (i know she is the one)
[GUITAR SOLO!!!]
your my godess
i just want to take you away (my princess)
hurry rush
get her number
so you can take her away (my princess)
Then I realized
She was just
a typical girl
I should have known all along
Why did I not think
Now i realize who that wink was for
Why did I even think
to say
your my godess
i just want to take you away (my princess)
hurry rush
get her number
so you can take her away (my princess)
[the song is at the conclusion now and all you hear is ]
The best friend |
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DamnaNefas
ubw rookie
Joined: Nov 01, 2005
Posts: 67
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| Posted: Sat Nov 12, 2005 5:53 pm |
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Sounds like someone has a crush....or really, had. There was a really excited emotion in your lyrics, it was prominent (which was a good thing, since you projected the emotion so well).
The ending was great, and nice job. i Loved it. |
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hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Tue Nov 15, 2005 5:07 pm |
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this is pretty awesome. no offense or anything but it kind of makes me think of a stacys mom kind of feel. but that song was awesome at one point.
anyway what im getting at is that i loved this. good work |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Tue Nov 15, 2005 10:22 pm |
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Good job, man. I enjoyed it.  Later! |
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