The devil's Redemption

ubw rookie Joined: Nov 01, 2005 Posts: 67

Fallen in a ditch and ended up in hell
Pull that goddamn trigger now,
'cause kicking won't kill me.

I've come from afar to see a number of helpless plees
disrespectful lies and taunts that no one else sees
Don't try to impress me with your unfunny wits
I'm not a tool or a dog that responds to commands and just sits

The outcome is mine if you make the first blow
By the end of this fight there will be your limp corpse to bestow
There's no reason to fight aimlessly back
For you clearly don't remember the face of the ghost that you once took attack

Sing a little prayer before the devil takes you
You sponge off my silent suffering but take pleasure to view
Tell me the pain you've now brought was for a cause
Because if not than i'll come back to show you your flaws

Don't hide away to cry with hollow weeps
Your nights will soon be withought good sleeps
Don't beg heaven for a second chance
You don't deserve another glance

You've trampled on your victim to praise that you have won
but never pulled the trigger of that requested gun
Look behind you to find the body that you defiled in joy
It's now a tower above you to mock you as a toy

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This is from the devil's point of view. A killer is supposed to be at rest with life but finds the devil in his victim's form to take redemption on their death.

I was infuriated with certain friends of mine...they can be backstabbing pieces of shit sometimes, but they are also an inspiration to me. I can never trust people, but to what do i owe them for my suffering? So i played the devil and victim in this poem. I'm a bitter person, meh.

Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 6:11 pm

We're all bitter, sometimes. I believe that you can't feel the ups if you don't experience some downs as well.

Aside from that, this is very powerful, the way you wrote it. It's also quite the original work, and was highly interesting to me. Great job! Very Happy

Later!

ubw rookie Joined: Nov 01, 2005 Posts: 67

Thanks.

Yeah...but i feel really blank at school lately, and than people ridicule me for my "strange" behavior. I get bitter a lot because i'm such a loner. My friends keeps ditching me without realizing it, my dad just moved to chicago two days ago, my contacts have been in my eyes for four days straight, I need a hair cut and my friend keeps joking about it (like blow me, dipshit!), people think i'm a stoner and smart, and i keep choking myself for looking in the mirror. I'm sorry, those aren't even reasonable reasons...i feel like a loser. I shouldn't have said that much personal stuff (i'm in a bad mood =/) but there's nothing to lose on the internet.

You're such an optimistic person, (it sounds like it by all your casual post, 'course i don't really know you) but I envy that. You 'effin rock.

Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 6:56 pm

LoL. Thanks.

I can only say one thing about them ridiculing you: Don't ever alter how you act, as an individual just because they do that. I know all about ridicule... Years later, that and other things almost turned me into a "fallen coward" (-suicidal tendencies Rolling Eyes

), but now I see that the people ridiculing me were just ignorant to the term, compassion.

-About the optimism... I don't even know exactly what happened with me, except that I literally woke up one day, after five days of having trouble functioning (no emphasis), and everything was suddenly alright. -Smiles, positivity, reflections on actions that I finally saw were screwed up... All the shit just stopped.

But if you want, I wrote a song that I think you should read (if you feel like it). It's title is, "Follow Your Lead", and I posted it quite a while ago. But if ya' use the Search button, and look up the title, you should be able to find it pretty quickly. That's up to you, though. Very Happy

Take care, Jessica. Smile

Later!

ubw rookie Joined: Nov 01, 2005 Posts: 67

I'll definitly check that out; It'll probably make me feel better.

The reason i'm less cheerful, i think, is because i've seen "the funniest thing in the world" and can't laugh at anything lesser than it. When somebody thinks something bad about me, i feel bad, but there's nothing i can do about it. I'm really at brink. My friends can't realize symbolism through my artwork. I hate them sometimes.

I'm glad you're smart, i can't get over my habits as easily though. I'm trying to cope new reasons as to why i act this way and why they act that way. Everyone thinks they're weird, but they're not. Not everyone is. If they don't like me for who i am, and then they claim that they are "weird" for something petty, well, that's a shame. Being weird is all i have right now but if they think they're in the same category, than i'm really nothing at all.

-sigh- i ramble bad. TTYL.

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