"Spit"

Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2005 4:09 am

Ok... In the last old song that I posted, about an hour and a half ago, I said I didn't know when I'd be able to write out any of the new ideas I've come up with, but I just wrote one out. I was posting these old ones, and I couldn't help myself. It hurt a little (cause' of what I mentioned before), but I did it. It's a familiar topic, but it seems the stronger I feel about something, the more I end up writing about it. Yes, I try not to, but oh well. It's called, "Spit".

"Spit"

(verse tune, but as an intro. w/lighter music, envisioned):
Trickling down my throat-
your toxic spit.
My mouth is pried open,
so I swallow it.

-Tasted before.
-Regurgitated by the gallons.
One more time,
and it could find the way

to my blood...
-to my blood.....
(Oh,) Don't know if I will be

(Chorus):
Poisoned by you(!)
So far, though slight illness has emerged,
I've choked it down, and let it out,
but still you spit.
My throat stings constantly,
and my stomach swirls.
You watch me gag it up,
and wait to start again.

-Sizzling into foam.
My abdomen cries.
I'd run if you'd quit,
but you've pinned your eyes (on my life.)

(Music envisioned for Pre-Chor. begins it, w/out singing at first):
(Oh,) Don't know if I will be

(Chorus)

-Struggling to breathe again.
My heart-rate rises so quickly.
Don't puncture me with, "Innocent."
So, you think you are? -You're so wrong.

I hope I'll never, end up being

(Chorus)

Thanks so much
for seeping destruction...
into me.

EnD

That's the first idea, in quite a while, that I've been able to actually write to completion, and also to sing the tunes envisioned for the different parts of the song while writing. Very Happy

I hope some people read this and enjoyed it. There's more to come, if anyone cares. Take care. Later!

ubw rookie Joined: Nov 01, 2005 Posts: 67

The subject of this is very odd...i don't think i'm exactly sure what the lyrics are about, but still a great job you've done here. I like the rhymes that you've added to it as well.

This would be an interesting song to hear.

Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 1:47 am

LoL. It's based on some shit I've seen in the past, on the discovery channel. People let out, I guess you could call them, tiny particles of spit when they speak, and this is sort of based on that, but more so. I envisioned a scene of someone standing close to me, observing a weird contraption they made, that slowly drips spit into me, normally released as they're speaking against everything I try to say. I know it sounds pretty disgusting, but it's a hidden meaning I was going for. I'm digusted, as well, with feeling frustration about "my skeptics."

I hope I made some kind of good sense with that. Thanks for the comment, as always. Smile

Later!

ubw rookie Joined: Nov 01, 2005 Posts: 67

lmao! spit must really piss you off....This is possibly the weirdest thing i've seen lyrics based off of. Except, 'til recently i've seen much weirder coming from a guy who calls himself "lil markie." Freak. X)

Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 6:04 pm

Yes, it is weird. Smile

That was exactly what I wanted it to be, 'cause part of attempting to write good lyrics is trying to make the words interesting too. It's what draws in curiosity. For instance, one of the things many KoRn fans took interest in, when the band was fresh off of releasing "Life is Peachy", was the weird, demonic sounding vocals in the song "Twist". I became a fan much later, but when I heard that, it was like, "Damn... My full attention is right on you guys..." Anyway, enough about that. I still gotta' read those threads. Wink

Later!

Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 8:58 pm

Totaly awsome, not sure but it gives me the vibe the song kicks ass, yet im sure it would also be a kick ass poem. SAWEET xD anyway yah, that was awsome ^.^=
~nIkKi~
oXoXoXo

Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 10:56 pm

Thank you, beautiful sinz. I appreciate the kind comment. Smile

I'm not feelin' too good physically, otherwise I'd probably type a little more. I'm a diabetic, and the reason I'm not feelin' that great, is because I have ketones. If anyone needs to know about it, I'll explain some other time. Later.

"Spit"

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