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hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Tue Oct 18, 2005 11:02 pm |
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Don’t breathe out just yet
It’s not our turn
Suffocating face down
In your perfume soaked sheets
But as you grip your suitcase
You don’t care
You make your way down the stairs
And all I can do is stare
I taste him on your lips
With this last awkward kiss
I wish I could say I don’t care
I still can’t catch my breath
Take another hit from my lungs
I can only feel when I’m stoned
I can only feel when the stars fall
We’re burning out
I can’t be your star anymore
Isn’t that what you said?
Isn’t that what you wanted?
Throwing another bottle over the pass way
I don’t know what I want
Just that I want your arms wrapped around me
For when I jump
I promise this time
We’ll do it right |
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Optikal_Delusion
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 22, 2005
Location: Australia
Posts: 73
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| Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 2:34 am |
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Woah.... That is beautiful.
Perfect imagery.
I am in love and repulsed at the same time by
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It's a very powerful piece.
You pulled me right in at the beginning and I wanted more at the end, but you wrote it so concisely and captured the emotions perfectly.
I love this so much.
Have you recorded any of your lyrics to music? |
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DamnaNefas
ubw rookie
Joined: Nov 01, 2005
Posts: 67
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| Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 5:21 pm |
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This is sad...possibly influenced by real life incidents? It's a nice piece of work, i especially like the last part of this (...when i jump...), even though it's depressing. It's a cool twist. |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 6:07 pm |
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Finally, the boards are slowly coming back to life. -And Chase is back to share more of his artistry. Nice job, Chase!  This is good from start to finish. Later! |
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