"Battle to Resolve"

Posted: Fri Oct 14, 2005 11:39 pm

Hey everyone. Smile

These are some lyrics I wrote on the 10th of this month. This one sounds like it's about a subject that I've written about before, but it's actually about a big mistake I made. I wrote it as I was thinking heavily about that mistake. The title is "Battle to Resolve", and it's centered entirely around how I felt the night it was written.

(-with the revision to an error in the bridge):
"Battle to Resolve"

The torment
of a battle.
-Waged by me,
against myself...
Emotions,
versus logic.
-So logical.
How couldn't I see this all before?

(Chorus):
I'm at war inside,
and there's nowhere to hide. I
can't bear the dispair, that I feel, for much longer.
I caused this to be.
-My only regret,
remorsefully mine.

-With two sides,
divided.
-Shrouded deep
within myself.
-Confusion.
-Risk in options.
-Words fallable.
I just couldn't see this all before.

(Chorus)

(Short Interlude, envisioned)

(Words to Bridge):
Will I see a tommorow?
Can I ever resolve what I told?
How could this have been so unknown,
to me? It's tearing a hole.

(Brief Pause in music and vocals)

(Backing vox' to be involved = words in parenthesis):
<4x> (How...?)
<4x>(How...?) How could I?

(How...?) I never meant the lies I spoke.
(How...?) I never would've even spoken.
(How...?) I never meant to set out,
like a ship into battle, but now, war has broken out.

(Double Chorus)

(Words to Outro):
<4x>It's mine.
-War rages.

EnD

I apologize for any confusion with this. I just want people to understand what I'm goin for when I write, and sometimes it can look pretty sketchy. -Like what you just read (-if ya' did). I'll be around. Smile

Later!

Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 6:42 am

Very familiar emotions expressed here, for me. But I feel this way when I get frustrated within myself when I want to create but can't get things the way I want, or if I want to write but I don't what write about.
Good lyrics here; emotive and a nice flow to them. I like the way you describe how you envision the song to be sung with the backing vox and the instrumental structure.
I don't know if the boat analogy has any relevance to your experience, but it just sticks out to me as though you've just thrown it in there near the end without having mentioned it before. I hope you get my meaning.
As always, this is just my opinion.
I hope you can put this and your other creations to music soon.
C u around.

ubw rookie Joined: Jun 28, 2005 Posts: 133

this is good i really like it. you need to get a band ASAP man.

Posted: Mon Oct 17, 2005 10:39 pm

Optik Delus.: The boat part is supposed to be like in very old war times when a large number of ships (like the Spanish Aramada) would do a sneak attack, a battle would break out, and then it would lead to sea-war (theme of the lyrics is I'm at war with myself). -No offense taken. Smile

Thanks and Later!

Thanks hereafter. I want a band, but I have no P.A. System, so it wouldn't work just yet. Someday soon, though. Later!

Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 2:45 am

I once heard a sea man say "you can fit a boat in a ship, but you can't fit a ship in a boat" and thats how I've been able to tell the difference; so using that philosophy a boat is, like a dinghy or a small vessel, but a ship is, as you said like a spanish armada or the titanic, something large, so that's my first point of criticism. When I read that part, I didn't pick up that you meant a military sea going vessel and so was confused.
Secondly, that lyric has relevence and context to you, but to me it just came out of no where. I hope you see what I mean.

That section was the only problem I had with the piece. i thought it was fantastic other than that little section.
This is just my opinion, but I think, from your previous conversations with me that you will take these little criticizms on board.
If you think I'm totally out of line, just tell me to shut up Wink

Peace.

Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 11:15 pm

-Nope. I don't take offense to criticisms, especially from those who are good critics.

You are definitely correct on this, and I greatly appreciate it. Very Happy

I'll re-write that line, and edit this shortly. Thank you!

However, though I can also see your point about the whole "ship" part seeming to come out of nowhere, I know that even today militaries use troops in battles (-Like the World's different Naval Forces). I guess I was just trying to add a touch of historical reference to it. -One kind of hidden.

Last thing I wanna' say, is that right now my word usage is making this reply sound somewhat offensive when I'm reading it over. So, don't take offense, 'cause I know that you were being respectful, and that's what I'm going for as well. I'm cool with you, man. Very Happy

Still, the internet can mold ones words into unintended insults, as they're communicated to others. I'm thinkin' somebody needs to fix this little problem. Anyway, I'm gonna' fix this and then take some "surgery medicine" again. I need sleep... Later Rowly!

ubw rookie Joined: Nov 01, 2005 Posts: 67

I love the diction, it's very emotional. At some point i actually heard singing in my head; it has a perfect flow for a song (i think).

I don't quite understand how you flow so well, (because i am so used to rhyming in poetry) but you do a great job at this.

Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2005 9:38 am

Thanks a lot! Smile

I don't mean to sound conceited, but it comes to me automatically, most times, and I just let it take shape. I'll be in touch. Later!

Posted: Wed Nov 16, 2005 10:41 am

Hey, I've been reading alot of your work.
This ones my fave!

-Levy

Posted: Wed Nov 16, 2005 4:04 pm

Thanks, Levy. I'm glad ya' liked it. Later!

"Battle to Resolve"

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