"And now, the fall..."

Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 3:16 am

This was written between the night and overnight of 9/22-9/23. I wrote it in about 25 minutes, somehow, and it's general idea is, "We (humankind) could destroy each other." There was a bad storm that night, and the power went out, so I basically wrote this next to a flashlight. It sucked... Laughing

But anyway...

"And now, the fall"

(Intro- Quiet vocals w/out music):
We, could be, at the
epitome of all doom.
We, could see, the clouds come down-
the same ones that loom overhead.

(Verse 1):
We, could be, at the
epitome of all doom.
We, could see, the clouds come down-
the same ones that loom overhead.
We, could feel, rain-drops,
emulsified into our blood.
We, could squeal, or scream,
and nothing would make it stop.

(Pre-Chor., w/out following Chorus):
This could be it-
the start of a fatal fall.
Are we prepared enough,
or even at all?

(Verse 2):
We, could meet, a wrath
that could sweep us away, like a broom to dirt.
We, could breathe, one last time,
in and out, and then come to pass.
Is it me, or is it cold out...?
Are we standing on a cliff, disguised as a couch?
If we roll off, what will we land upon...?
-Floor or ground...?
-Floor or ground?

(Pre-Chor.)

(Chorus):
We must take heed and be wise.
We all, soon, could be over,
and we could go over...
the edge.....
We can't be careless.

(Bridge):
So think clear...
Be wary of what may unfold.
Just think clear...,
before you find yourself thinking...,
"And now, the fall."

(Chorus)

(Repition of 1st half of Verse 1, as an Outro):
We, could be, at the
epitome of all doom.
We, could see, the clouds come down-
the same ones that loom overhead,

(Very short Interlude, last line immediately before end):
and that's when, we'll fall...

EnD

A quick question: Does anyone know if I was correct, when using the word 'epitome', to describe the full embodyment of doom? I researched to find out, but nothing's specifying whether or not 'epitome' has only a positive meaning. My father told me that was the case after I wrote this, but I've always thought it just meant the ideal embodyment of whatever the word's referring to. If anyone can help, it would be appreciated, because I'd want to make revisions A.S.A.P. Thanks, and I hope you enjoyed the lyrics. Later!

Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 5:43 am

Yes, you were correct to use the word epitome. It basically means the 'utmost example of'.
As you said in your comment in my thread, very similar writing technique. I would love to hear this sung to music. It sounds like it could be set to solemn hard rock or metal music. It's good when you can get genre transcension.
It needs a little bit of work, IMO; just some adjusting of the basic metaphors like 'Floor or ground'. That just stuck out to me.
Other than that, it's a really good piece.
Do you mind me asking how old you are and how long you've been writing?
I am 21 and 'Two Wrongs (Foetus)' lyrics were the scond ones I'd written, so that was written in April of 04 and the first lyrics I wrote were done about 2 weeks earlier, so that's about a year and a half.

Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 6:36 am

Cool. I thought I used it correctly. Smile

Thanks much.

The answers to what you asked are that I'll be 21 in november, and I've been writing for approximately three years.

Also, two things I'll note. 1) This is, in fact, sung in a solemn alternative metal type style, which is pretty much what you were talking about. -and- 2) The reason the words "floor or ground" are arranged that way are based on two reasons. First, if a person rolls over the edge of a couch, they'd land on the floor, in comparison to rolling off of a cliff, where they would hit the ground below. That is just to basically differenciate the pain felt in each situation. Secondly, with the way that I sing that part, anything more, or anything less, would ruin the way I envisioned the sound of it.

Lastly, I'm glad you enjoyed it, man. Nothing I'm saying here is meant to be defensive, because no one lyricist can know the exact reasons for the arrangement of certain parts, of another one's lyrics. They can only note it based on thought, and give insight to try to help, which is exactly what you did. When I explain stuff like this, the only purpose is so when (or if) others read my lyrics, they can have more of an understanding. I hope that makes sense, and doesn't offend, because I really appreciate your comments. Later, man!

Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 12:53 am

Yes, I agree, thoroughly. It's good that you explain things the way you do, coz people can take things the wrong way and seem to get insulted easily since this text based form of communication can not express tone or emphasis as one can in a face to face conversation, that is unless the writer uses this or this or emoticons, but I've found that few people do.
Have you recorded any music for any of your songs?
I have only just finished recording the instrumentals (guitars, drums and bass <- coz vox r an instrument too Wink

) for Don't Let Me Wake (lyrics not posted yet. Might do so today...), but I'm still working on the melody for the vox.

Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 3:36 pm

No man. No music even composed yet.

I come up with the music inside my mind, and I write to what I envision. I was using a guitar tab program called TabIt to "map out" that music, so to say, but since the hard drive was just restored, I don't have TabIt again, yet.

Also, when you get the whole song recorded, I'd like to hear it, but for some reason I'm still not able to download shit from off of web sites (-such as this one). However, after you've got it finished, send me a PM. What I am able to do is download attachment files from e-mails, and I could PM you back with my e-mail address, so if you then wanted to send it, I could listen to it that way. I gotta' go read threads, and post a little. Later, man!

"And now, the fall..."

UBW Resources

Music Forums

Music Forums

Partners