hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2005 9:22 pm |
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nothing much to say about this one at all except i was emotional and i may or may not have been high, the two dont make a good combination. but i got this out of it. needs new title my title creativity blows.
“And I miss you”
Clutching close to these old sheets
That smell of your cheap cigarettes
Clinging to the static
That plays on the TV screen
Hanging on to every breath
Afraid each one is my last
I memorized everything I wanted to say
And etched it into my skin
Trace the dotted lines with my finger tips
Like you use to trace my lips
As we laid on your bedroom floor
Fighting over who loves who more
You walked off the dance floor
As the juke box played our song
I don’t care if you don’t love me back
I don’t care if I’m never missed
But I’m in love with the pain that you bring
My heart is melting threw my sleeve
Held up on a pedestal waiting to fall
And I’m left alone with your shadow on my bed
Intoxicated from the lack of innocence,
The pain and the sex
I’m standing outside your bedroom door
As he tells you no one loves you more then him
And deep down I know that he’s right
It kills me to say that he’s right
But no one will ever need the pain
As much as I do
And I miss you
Oh god I miss you
I don’t care if you don’t love me back
I don’t care if I’m never missed
But I miss you
I miss you
Did you know that I miss you?
I miss you… |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 12:58 am |
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Dude, what are you talkin' about? LoL.
This is very enjoyable, in my opinion. You have improved quite a bit since I left the boards. Also, I think with the words you wrote, the title is just right. It's straight forward, and I feel it fits your lyrics well, in this case. The question is, are you, satisfied with it? If you are, than there's no reason to change it.
I'll be reading more.  Great job, Chase. Later! |
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