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guitarist
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Joined: Aug 20, 2005
Location: Sydney, Aus
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| Posted: Tue Sep 13, 2005 5:05 am |
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This song is punk rock (well i hope it turned out that way)
One bit of inspiration is all I need
Don’t bite that hand feeds
Cuz this life is reckless I cant GO! On
(im so jaded im so cut)
U thaught this wouldn’t hurt me
U thaught that this wouldn’t bring me down
Turns out that u were wrong, were better off alone
Cuz this time you’ve gone to far
Throo these eyes I can not see
U showed me that I cant believe
Anything!
everything I see
its all to good for me
it breaks my heart and soul inside
to hear these lies
Im callin out for help
Will anyone answer me~
Im not sure if I can hold on
Much longer
thats it at the moment
im not very good at writing chorus's
so i dont have one but im working on it
plz leave comment
thank you
Josh - guitarist of 3sum |
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ImL
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Location: New Zealand
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| Posted: Tue Sep 13, 2005 6:05 am |
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hey Guitarist
nice one
Get a strong desperate, just hanging by a thread feeling when reading it. Should sound perfect for a fast beat punk song.
the girl you're writing about, woah, you gotta ditch her 
Can't wait to hear the finished song
ImL |
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guitarist
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| Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2005 1:00 am |
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sweet that was exactly what i was aiming for thanks ImL |
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dirt
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| Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2005 11:35 am |
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right im no lyricist! But this sounds alrite, i like the line "im so jaded, im so cut"  |
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Guitarman152
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Joined: Aug 03, 2005
Location: Hamden, Ct. . . .USA
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| Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2005 1:58 pm |
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Hey Josh, . .very good lyrics man, ya know sometimes the best stuff artist's do is often inspired by painfull crap. that's just the way it is I guess . . .let me know when you finish it off and put it to music and i'll be sure to check it out . . . thanks for listening to my stuff and you hang in there man.
Peace,
Erick . . . .  |
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guitarist
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| Posted: Wed Sep 21, 2005 3:10 am |
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thanks for the feed back guys |
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