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artificialsweetener
ubw newbie
Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Sat Aug 27, 2005 1:43 pm |
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stab me in the back again
its ok
it reminds me that i'm real
that i'm not completely numb yet
it reminds me that i can still feel
you know that you're the only one
who can still make my mascara run
the only one who still has the power to break my heart
and feel free, its yours to do with it what you please
it belonged to you from the start...
and though nothing else can touch me
you're my silver bullet
so just shoot me now
so i can follow you down
the passing of time could tear us apart
the sun's going down and you're getting dark
building up your walls and putting me on the back shelf
do you feel that i dont know you anymore?
i know you better than you know yourself
you used to be so strong
its killing me to see
that you're falling now
i'll follow you down
i'll remain frozen in time
this is only temporary, i know this deep inside
you'll remember who you really are and turn around
you'll come back for me, only to see
that i've been right behind you all along
you've picked me up in a thousand ways before
those times cant be erased
i'm too weak to do the same for you now
but i'll follow you down
i'll prove to you my loyalty
though nobody understands
i'll stand by you until the day i die
even if the waiting kills me
even if you kill me... |
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minusme
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Joined: Jan 25, 2004
Location: New York
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| Posted: Sun Aug 28, 2005 6:02 am |
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Great job on these!
You do a fantastic job of expressing your emotion, and it makes a fantastic read.
Ron |
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hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Sun Aug 28, 2005 9:50 pm |
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hey im not surpised how great this is. if you dont mind me asking how old are you and how logn have you been writing. i only ask because im a huge fan of your stuff. iam honestly jealous of every word you write, i wish i could think of the stuff you come up with. |
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dagon
ubw rookie
Joined: Feb 12, 2005
Location: glenrothes, UK.
Posts: 199
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| Posted: Wed Aug 31, 2005 2:35 pm |
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I see this alongside a huge gothic rock track.
Have you got any thoughts to record it and let us hear it? |
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artificialsweetener
ubw newbie
Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Thu Sep 22, 2005 3:12 pm |
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gothic rock?? really?? haha thats not how i meant it to sound...i guess my stuff is more intense than i realize. i would love to record some stuff but i can never find bands that want female singers... |
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Optikal_Delusion
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 22, 2005
Location: Australia
Posts: 73
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| Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 11:15 pm |
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That's a shame. You're stuff is really deep and meaningful. I really liked this. Reminds me of Ted Hughes' work speaking about his relationship with his wife for a time Sylvia Plath. It was called The Shot.
How old are you and how long have you been writing.
You are really good. |
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artificialsweetener
ubw newbie
Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 10:18 pm |
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hey thanks, im 17...ive been writing for...maybe 5 years?? |
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