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hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Wed Aug 17, 2005 10:45 pm |
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this one i just wrote at 1 in the morning. just feeling depressed and got an idea then just went with it.
"Dont say a word"
Don’t say a word
It’s one in the morning
And we’re not alone
With your hand in mine
Your heads on my shoulder
And I’m losing track of time
My clocks blinking 12
But that’s just fine
We’ll go up the stairs
You go into the bathroom
To fix your hair
Now you’re lying next to me
And I’m shaking
I can’t feel a thing
My lips turn numb
At your touch
The pictures on the wall
Watch with half open eyes
As you take off your shirt
Now our clothes make up the floor
Our shadows watch
As I light a match
The smoke fills our lungs
With much needed chemicals
And you breathe in
Can I walk you home?
At your door
Your hands are on my waist
And I moved the hair
From your face
I’ll never forget
Those soft brown eyes
As you closed them
And leaned towards me
Can I call you again?
Your number written on my arm
But you don’t answer the phone
Now I lay awake
Hugging your shadow
I’m left alone
Did you know?
Did you know I miss you?
But how could you know
You don’t say a word |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Thu Aug 18, 2005 6:57 am |
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You called this, "Don't say a word"? -Well, I'll just say one, man... Wow... Ok, I've got to say one more thing...  It's simply just great. Yes. So, Later! |
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guitarist
ubw active poster
Joined: Aug 20, 2005
Location: Sydney, Aus
Posts: 233
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| Posted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 11:16 pm |
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damn i wish i could write stuff like that its awesome how do u come up with this stuff ? |
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sixtysecondminute
ubw rookie
Joined: May 27, 2005
Location: Solihull, UK
Posts: 186
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| Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 1:08 pm |
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| guitarist wrote: | | damn i wish i could write stuff like that its awesome how do u come up with this stuff ? |
It sounds to me like an experiance... and a nice one at that 
I realy like this. Some of the words realy sum up how I have felt at times in the past... so I can realy see this as being written entirely from the heart.
Great work  |
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hereafter
ubw rookie
Joined: Jun 28, 2005
Posts: 133
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| Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2005 11:46 pm |
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hey thanks guys. haha i cant say this was an actual experience but jsut shit i was feeling at the time i wrote it. |
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deltarain
ubw rookie
Joined: Aug 18, 2005
Location: In my room, listening to loud music, playing guitar.
Posts: 132
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| Posted: Sat Aug 27, 2005 7:59 am |
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It's a great song- I really like it! I don't know what to say other than - it's just good! I think the title fits! |
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artificialsweetener
ubw newbie
Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Sun Aug 28, 2005 8:49 pm |
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i LOVE this...i like the whole "story song" thing...especially when its a story i can relate to...even if it wasnt based on a real experience lol
thank you so much for your compliments on my songs, yours are definitely some of my favorite to read too  |
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