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hereafter
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| Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 11:55 pm |
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the name is just some random girl name that was in a show at the time i was writting this. the songs a little long so i might cut out a bit but i cant decide what to cut out.
*EDIT*
read the updated version below |
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hereafter
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| Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 9:55 pm |
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its been edited once again |
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hereafter
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| Posted: Sun Aug 28, 2005 1:51 am |
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ok this one just never seems finished to me, i keep going over it. i think now i finaly got something im really happy with. we'll see how it goes.
“Kristen”
Laying on the carpet
Just you and me
Carving your heart into my chest
The marks on your neck
Are starting to fade
Along with your smell on my clothes
We’re not hanging on by much
But we’re making out, just fine
Holding you closer then the dreams
That fill my head
The sight of you is just a tease
As they play our song from roof tops
We’ll share this last dance
In the vacant parking lots
Trying to savor your taste on my lips
As you listen to the beat of my heart
I’m jealous of every breath
That clings to your lips
Their closer then I’ll ever be
As we walk down these empty roads
For the last time your hand in mine
My heart is yours
Casting shadows over the sidewalks
As we take the back ways
I’ll scream our song from the roof tops
Until I lose my voice,
And my lungs are bleeding
I’ll wish on every tear that
Falls from the sky
That this dance never ends
That this first kiss isn’t the last
I’ll fall asleep on the carpet
Next to your imprint
Tracing the dotted lines
On my heart
My hands are shaking, like an addict
I’m going threw withdrawal of you
Thinking of how you’re making out |
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artificialsweetener
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Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Sun Aug 28, 2005 8:56 pm |
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this is amazing...seriously, this song is everything i want my writing to be...keep it up!!
i especially like this last part...
| Quote: | My hands are shaking, like an addict
I’m going threw withdrawal of you
Thinking of how you’re making out |
awesome. |
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