RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2005 1:49 am |
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This took up a good amount of time, when I wrote it today. The intended meaning is basically, "If you're too kind to some people, they may take advantage of that kindness, and hurt your sense of self-worth." I've experienced that, but I wanted to write this without centering it around my specific experience.
The symbolism may not seem to make sense, but if you break it down, it's like this: "An emerald"= someone who is unintentionally, too kind to others. "A cold stone"= someone who uses others, in a malliscious and hidden way, to gain something. Usually someone like that, is seeking "gold"= the greatest amount of whatever they are looking to get from you. I'm fine now, but less than 6 months ago I realized what a supposed "friend" had done, and I pretty much closed up, socially. Still, when I sing this, it doesn't show emotions as strong as many of the songs that I've written. It's title is, "The Cavern of Lost Emeralds", and I'd like you all to take a look, and if you can, reply. Thanks. 
"The Cavern of Lost Emeralds"
Presciousness can give
the impression of vulnerability
to those in search of gold,
with disuasive agility.
Beware of what you give.
There lies danger in possibility.
Some will use you soul, untold, for the gold,
and leave your mind, in atrophy.
If time is revealing, that you're being
violated mentally,
it's too late, to escape.
You must now attempt recovery.
(Chorus):
The jewel that once was you, scraped.
Inner-value, is replaced with shame. You've been pawned away.
They take the gain.
Now you're an emerald, displaced,
and your worth now hides,
so deep, within a cave.
(Moderately long Interlude)
(Bridge):
A cold stone, will plot against an emerald.
The strategized tactics devised by them, to most, are immoral.
Yet they follow...,
and chase what they crave.
They'll chase you, as well
if they think, that you won't see, their plan...
(Chorus)
(Outro):
The cavern,-
of emeralds-
is deeper-
than any hole, you'll know.
They'll leave you there,
and resume their quest,
without a care.
To the depths with you(!)
-Reside in solitude(!)
-Decreasing value.
Miles and miles...
Below Now(!)...
EnD
Do any of you revise when you post your lyrics? I always seem to end up making an average of 3-5 revisions each time that I post one. It's like I want to make it as good as I can before I post it for everyone to check out. Well..., it's kind of more tied to my effort to improve upon what I wrote, and to better fulfill my attempt to excel my ability further. It doesn't matter...  Reply at will, because I like to hear what your minds are saying inside. Later! |
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artificialsweetener
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Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Tue Aug 09, 2005 3:10 pm |
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i really like this...i cant really put my finger on what it is about it that i like, maybe cuz i like everything about it! it has a really good rhythm, it all flows together really well. i like the theme, cuz i definitely know what its like to be taken advantage of for being too nice. some parts of dont exactly make sense to me, but i like that about it too, because i know that it makes sense to you and its personal to you...theres nothing overdone or cliche about any of it, and thats awesome. good job!! |
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RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 2:46 am |
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Thank you. I was trying to make this interesting, yet also a little mysterious. Also, it has emotion put into the words, but vocally, it's not as emotional as others I've written. -Glad you liked it. Later! |
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cprmark
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Joined: Jan 24, 2005
Location: Oxford, Mississippi (USA)
Posts: 22
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| Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 3:01 pm |
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Loved it. My favorite line is "A cold stone will plot against an emerald". It sent my mind racing ahead to the fact that, in time, no stone surrounding an emerald will be left.  |
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