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artificialsweetener
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Joined: Aug 05, 2005
Location: indiana
Posts: 40
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| Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2005 4:29 pm |
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kinda cheesy. oh well.
How is it that now, though everything has changed
Every time I look at you, I still feel the same
And every night I spend with you
Still takes my breath away?
I’m still your favorite past-time
And you’re still my favorite mistake
But every time I swear I’m done with you
I go back anyway…
I think I’ve gone crazy
Just commit me, baby
For what I’m about to say
But would it really be so bad
If you’re the best thing I ever have
And I can never find it in me to walk away?
As times passes, you’ll grow up a little bit
Maybe I’ll learn how to pick up the phone
Your eyes can teach me to stop being insecure
And maybe I’ll never have to be alone
Tell me if you think I’m expecting too much
And this is just my imagination running wild
I know that our past is not as happy as all that
But it all just falls away with your smile
Puppy dog eyes can’t lie, can they?
I’ll take you back if you’ll take me away…
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Cerebellus
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Joined: Aug 04, 2005
Posts: 12
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| Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2005 10:43 pm |
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Yeah, kinda cheesy, but extremely catchy. It also deals with a subject that is immediately empathetic. Nice work. |
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RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2005 11:18 pm |
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I agree with Cerebellus. It seems written in a somewhat more simple way than some lyricists, it's catchy, and it is cheesy, but I think that it's only slightly cheesy.  I like it. Good job!
One more thing... I learned something new from this, though I'm pretty sure that I knew it before, and then forgot about it. Anyway, the word "commit" didn't look like it was used right when I saw it, but I always try to speak with correct intelligence behind what I say. So, I looked up the meaning, and it's completely suitable for what you were going for. For some reason, I was thinking "admit" was the right word. Oh well.  Cheers and welcome, you!
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