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RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
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| Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 12:12 am |
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This is another one about stagnancy, and how I feel about it. I do have a somewhat smaller range of subjects that I write about, but I do try to variate each one in different ways (other than subject matter). I titled this one "Abeyant", because when I started writing this today, I was looking in my dictionary for something that I could use in the first verse, and instead also found my title. For those who don't know, abayant means temporary inactivity. I hope you all like it.
"Abeyant"
I'm indisposed.
I rub my eyes,
and then they close.
I see myself,
and think of importance.
To them, I seem so frivolous.
This is ridiculous.
They beg to differ.
(Chorus):
Absurdity is me...,
but this time, it's abeyance.
Change unearthed, but they believe
that I choose to be...,
stationary.
I'm in disguise,
with no goal
to hide what I know.
I know myself,
but all they see is a mask.
I'm sure. I never wanted this.
I'm not ridiculous.
They beg to differ.
(Chorus)
(Music changes to a very different sound, and a short interlude plays through to the bridge lyrics.)
(Bridge):
Sorry. That was me who gasped;
it's getting hard to breathe.
-And I cannot settle down,
because you disrupt my ease.
Just leave me alone,
with your buzzing drone.
It's like a swarm of bees.
Please take your shit and, go...
(quick vocalization, not worded)
(Music changes back to it's previous sound)
(Chorus)
(4x through):
Oh...
Shut the f*ck up, and go!
EnD
If you can, let me know what you think. I'm gonna go post one more for tonight, and then look around the UBW some more. But..., I've noticed there's been somewhat of a lull in this forum, with lyrics posts today and yesterday. Hopefully all you writers will start posting more again tomorrow. I enjoy that. 
Cheers and a smile, All!
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En-En
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Joined: Apr 30, 2005
Posts: 81
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| Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2005 2:07 am |
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man i like dis shit realy like it
but der's just som rims i mean here ya gota mak a lil bit mo rims just a lil bit man
and it gona turn to beta
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RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2005 3:35 am |
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I don't mean to shut you out or anything, but the way this sounds, when I sing it, sounds exactly how I want it to sound, and if I rhymed more, it would actually be too much.
You'd have to hear it, to understand my reasoning, but there's no way for me to put an audio recording of it on this site right now. Also, if you look closely, I rhyme different parts, with other parts of the song, mainly in the verses. In this song, the last three lines in the two verses rhyme with each other ("close" and "know", "myself" and "myself", and "importance" and "is a mask"). I don't try to use this style of rhyming. It just sort of occurs ntaurally, as I'm writing.
Thanks anyway, En-En!  I hope that made sense. Cheers!
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En-En
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| Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2005 3:38 am |
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aait i got yar stil man i realy gotcha
and man hala at me abota cabiration shit...
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