"Dusty Record, Needle Scratch"

Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 2:47 am

Hey All,

This is called, "Dusty Record, Needle Scratch". I wrote it about a week and a half ago, and it is about everything every person has said to me that disregards me telling them, that the way I think has changed. Some family members and a couple friends have thought for a long time that I am a lazy person, because before it seemed that way. Now I've changed inside, but their views are still the same, and it shows through many of the things they say to me. I'm sort of stuck in a stagnant time period, and that is why they continue to think I'm lazy. The only difference is, now I'm trying much harder. Read and enjoy...

"Dusty Record, Needle Scratch"

The song, plays through.
-Same song again, but modified.
Whoever wrote this song
used the wrong rhyme,
and the needle plays the track repeatedly.

It has a new meaning.
I don't want to listen.
The needle always scratches,
then it sends the same-

(Chorus):
Message.....
Over, and over,
it skips and plays the parts
so similar, to what they meant before.
I.....
know it's broken.
The song is broken...
When will this end?

This song, it's played out.
The words dig in. I know if I,
could only rewrite this song,
I'd reinvent each line,
and listen closer than I've been listening.

But instead, it's demeaning,
and I'm forced to listen.
the needle scratches, in my ears,
as it sends the same- (the same old-)

(Chorus)

(Long Bridge):
The record is dirty,
tarnished from build up of dust,
and all the deficiencies
of the phonograph, are evident.

Parts of the track are ruined when the,
magnetic pick-up fails to read correctly.
The shiny black surface
has now become damaged.

I hear the meaning changed.
I'd rather not listen, anymore.
The needle scratches,
again, again, again, again.
It's the same-

(Chorus)

(This part, that starts a long Outro, to be barely heard if ever recorded):
The song keeps looping.
It seems the scratch always moves on,
after a while.
-And every time the song has ended,
it plays again,
and I drop lower.

I press the button. It stays on.
I try to ignore. Still, it plays on.
I feel the aching disgrace of discouragement
served by every chord.

(repeated twice more, after first time sung):
It's played out.

-with interruptions,
by the needle scratch.
Yeah, oh... oo...

EnD

Yes..., I'm aware this one is quite long, written out, but it's only moderately long when I sing it. -Around 4Mins., 45 secs. I also know that it has some repetitive word usage, but I really didn't care as much with this one. To me, it sounds fine the way it is, and somehow it's not too noticable when practiced. Thanks for reading, and if you reply, thanks in advance for that, too.

Cheers and a smile, All!

RiCterMan

Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 3:15 pm

this is pretty cool...the metaphors are very creative...my only criticism is i think its a bit too wordy and repetitive...then again, that is the subject of the song...so maybe that was intentional...lol

Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 4:55 pm

hey well im back from vacation (obviously) this song was really interesting to me and i really want to put a post about it, but i literally just a call to go somewhere,so i'll leave a comment in a few hours when i get back. but i really enjoyed this one. i love the metaphors.

Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 10:44 pm

Thanks to both of you. Smile

Artif. Swtnr: In this case, it wasn't a thought out intention. I started writing, and as I write I create the rest of the tune, other than what I was already thinking, when the idea came to mind. The repetition sounded good the way it is here, so I just went with that. I'm glad you enjoyed it. The lyrics that I've read from you, so far, are very cool, and I hope you post a lot more in the future!

guitarchick: -Hope you had a fun vacation, and welcome back to the forums.

If either of you would like to, hit me up on AIM. My AOL s/n is brokensidemicman, though that may change sometime soon. If you try, and can't reach me, just ask for the new one in a PM. Cheers!

RiCterMan

Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 11:09 pm

ok i finally am able to respond to this.
i love the metaphors used in this song. i could be wrong, but it seems as if you are the record, and when you say a build up of dust has tarnished the record, it seems like the dust is all of the negative things in your life,and they are all evident on you. along with the line " the shiny black surface has now become damaged." i took that to mean that on the outside you were once sure of who you were, but due to everything that's brought you down, you're confidence is slightly breaking down too. i also like how earlier in this song you wanted to reword the song that was playing, and really listen to the message. then later on, the song has in fact changed, but you're desire to hear it is gone. but you must hear it, over and over. I think that symbolizes several things all at once. i agree some of the lines were slightly repetitve, but you're also talking about something repetitive as well, something happening over and over without your consent, the song playing. so i think it works.

i personally love longer songs, it gives the artist a chance to further express themself.

I'll try to IM you next time i see your away message isnt up.

Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2005 12:07 am

Honestly, that could be the intended meaning for this in the past, but it wasn't in this case. I think it's sort of cool that you were able to percieve that meaning from this, hence the reasoning for the previous sentence.

Of course' the self confidence aspect of the meaning was intended with it. Nobody seems to have faith in me, and when they point out what they believe in, because of past observations, it really makes me believe that I'm nothing. I know what is different about me now, but they keep repeating everything they said before, because I'm not yet able to prove it. I can't understand why some people ignorantly follow the saying, "Seeing is believing." I think if I were, also, to do that with every thing in my life, I'd be much worse off right now.

But hey, I know very well that I'm not the only one in this predicament, and I never talk about these kind of personal feelings in hopes of gaining anyone's sympathy. Sympathy usually seems to make me feel a little strange. Is that odd? Neutral

Oh well... I guess it's better to feel odd when someone shows sympathy, than to have the intent of getting it, and somehow feeling good. Bye All!

"Dusty Record, Needle Scratch"

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