"Remnants"

Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2005 6:40 am

This piece of lyrics was inspired by something kind of funny that happened the other night. I'm pretty clumsy sometimes, and that applies to both, things that I do, and some of the way that I think. What happened wasn't too big a deal, but it hurt (hurts) a hell of a lot. I was on the telephone, listening to what my friend was saying, and I was walking quickly into my living room, without much caution. Then, I slammed my toe into the wall, right by the entrance to that area of the house. Two quick snaps, some mild embarassment, and my attempt to not look stupid have now yielded to strong pain in my toe. Amazingly enough, this made me think about some of the maneurisms I have, and how they really annoy me. Who would've thought that slamming my toe into a wall would be lyrical inspiration? The title is, "Remnants". Enjoy...

"Remnants"

I find new ways
to stupify myself.
I'm beside myself
in my brain.
There are pains
that cause me to rise and swell.
I might has well
have no name.

I find an anguish in the smallest things.
Something needs to click
before I crack,
and break.

(Chorus):
This isn't working.
I scream, "Malfunction!", to the mirror.
I woke up, I felt fine; I still do,
but I highlight and underline, errors...
Some things still don't feel right-
the stupid petty shit that I do.
-That I still do.
They remind, and reinforce, what's true.

I'm up for change.
I apply myself,
but despise myself
with my displays.
Lacking grace,
(I'm) wondering why I'm held
by my sense of smell
picking up shame.

I find this peril when analyzing me.
Some things need to fit
before I am
displaced.

(Chorus)

(Bridge):
It reminds me,
from deep inside me.
Shouting loudly,
the signs of idiocy still evident.

(Interlude to go here; ideas in mind.)

(Chorus)

(Sung repeatedly, leading up to the last note.):
La, Da Da Da,
La, Da Da,
Da-aa...

(single note, to end the song):
Oh...

EnD

That's that. I know the last part looks stupid when read, but this ending is made up of non-verbal vocalizations, and that's just the basic way the singing sounds when spelled out. It doesn't sound like some kind of "kids song," or anything. It's hard to explain. Still, it's definitely my favorite ending out of any that I have written, and I kept it in the post, because I don't like to leave out any parts of my lyrics, even if what is typed out seems confusing. Now, I'm gonna sleep, I think...

Cheers and a smile, All!

RiCterMan

Any Mistakes with typing are from tiredness. If found, excuse them.

ubw rookie Joined: Apr 30, 2005 Posts: 81

it's aait man i mean it ain't so madafuckin hot... like ya new shit.. but it's cool
ya new ting is realt fat....mo fat den dis...

PIS

INDEFINITE

Posted: Tue Aug 02, 2005 3:44 am

See, when I judge my own lyrics I never say that they're any better than just good. I've stated why, before, and it's because I feel the truth of quality, is based on others opinions.

What I think about, when forming an opinion about something that I've written being good or bad, is based on two things: 1: How good, or bad, I feel I am singing it. -And 2: How good, or bad, I feel I accomplished what I was wanting to do with the words, that are on the paper.

In my own, personal opinion, this one seems to be my best, because the lyrics are just right (-for how I wanted them to be), and what I've managed to do with my voice, while practicing the ending to this one, is actually more than what I was going for, when I visualized the way I wanted it to sound. I just hope others will think the same if they get the chance to hear it in the future. Then, I can truly know if this one surpasses just being, "good."

Thanks for the reply, En-En. Cheers!

RiCterMan

ubw rookie Joined: Jun 28, 2005 Posts: 133

i like this one. I know Ive said this before but your songs would go perfect to grunge music. take no offense to that, I love grunge music. But I no thats not your style, but Im telling you itd work perfectly.
Tonight Im gonna write some grungy sounding stuff on the guitar and show you how well it could go.

but thats jsut my opinon, anyway as for the actual song, I think its really good. I too am very clumsy. Ive slammed my toe into so many walls its not funny anymore.

keep up the good work.

Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 11:57 pm

Man.... -You serious? Have I taken offense to anything on here, ever?
(-Joking.) Laughing

See, I don't have the grunge voice. So, I wouldn't try to be grunge to fit my writing. I honestly take that comment as somewhat of a compliment though, cause' grunge has a great sound, and if you think my lyrics could work well that way, I think it's kind of cool.

The sound I go for doesn't really exist. I just sing, and let me voice go where it pleases. I call my voice "Mr. Shmoe." (No, not really...) To be serious about it, I used to attain a similar sound to whatever band's lead vocalist I was really into at the time. I didn't try to; it just sort of happened. I started to work at just letting my voice become my own, and now I think I sound similar to some lead singers vocal sound's combined, but it's only similar, and not intended. I have a pretty unique sound, since I "let go."

Yeah, and the last thing that I'll say... My toe still hurts, but it's funny, to me, now. My view about it is what some people would tell others to do: I prefer to laugh at myself about this type of thing. I may get frustrated at myself for a short time (less than 20mins, most of the time), but I always get through that when it ocurrs. Still, this song is about the remaining irritants that are still a part of who I am, and now and then I do get pretty down about that, but I haven't been strongly depressed in months. Not to brag though... Depression sucks, and I'm not someone who chooses to do that, for obvious reasons (I think). Well, Cheers to All!

RiCterMan

"Remnants"

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