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sixtysecondminute
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Location: Solihull, UK
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Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2005 6:47 pm Reply with quote

So I havn't realy got any need to be writing anything else... but A few lines came to me and I thought I may aswell throw somthing together for the hell of it. I decided for a change I would use a rhyme scheme with a lot of emphasis as a sort of experimant, contrary to my usual writing style. I don't like it too much, especially when I compare it to my past work... but meh. I don't think I'll ever use it for anything unless anyone thinks it is any good... but I doubt you will if you are honest Razz



Every day of my life,
I search inside the spite,
Of my mind for a reason,
To leave you behind,
But I cant seem to find you,
The words or the time,
That you ask me to give you,
On that fatefull night,

I look into your eyes,
A smile's no disguise,
Your eyes tell a story,
Of hatred and lies,
What you say never seems,
Like the truth but it brings,
All these feelings to my throat,
That make me feel sick,

Every night of my death,
I fight for somthing left,
In my heart that I'm battling,
With demons to get,
Control over, under me,
Somthing breaks and plunders me,
Tells me that there's more,
To this tale, than I'll ever see,

I look into your eyes,
A smile's no disguise,
Your eyes tell a story,
Of hatred and lies,
What you say never seems,
Like the truth but it brings,
All these feelings to my throat,
That make me feel sick,

And I wish that this life was,
As simple as you make it out to be,

And I wish that my life was,
As simple as you make it out to be,
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RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
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Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2005 9:27 pm Reply with quote

You're askin for honesty...? I think I can do that, man. -Have each time, so far.

It's hard to judge it's quality, because I have no idea how you would sing it, otherwise it truthfully isn't that bad. I'd say that though it's not incredible, if I were you, I wouldn't just not use it. Instead I'd do exactly what you said you did when you wrote it. Along with your band, try to experiment with the actual sound of the music. I mean, basically I should say experiment a lot more with the music, because when music is created, it's always an experiment. But try to make both the lyrics and the instrumental aspects a lot different than how you guys would normally sound, and if it works out very well, you never know what could ocurr. Cheers, Tom!

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