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Bullet41
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2005 12:58 pm Reply with quote

Have been looking for an answer that i cannot find
this questions i got in my head are breaking me inside
why do i fell so paronoid
it seems all answers cant fill the void
this questions are goona get me destroyed

Does thiss world have an purpose
because every thing fells hopeless
(Inside of me)
i need some help with all this questions
(please someone help me)

Please someone tell me the truth if am goona survive
am looking for an answer that i still cannot find
this questions is swellin up in my mind
it seems am not goona make it this time

does this world have an purpose
because everthing seems hopeless
(inside of me)
i need some help with all this questions
(Please someone help me)

This life is falling away from me
please someone help me
(FROM MY FALL)

does this world have an purpose
because everything seems hopeless
(inside of me)
i need some help with all this questions
(please someone help me)

Bullet 41

Please post your view on this song i wrote.This song is based on how i fell so please post on your view.

And please dont use this song.This song is From my band From Life To Death.so please dont use.
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minusme
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Posted: Sun Jul 17, 2005 9:05 pm Reply with quote

Welcome to the UBW forums Bullet and thanks for sharing your words!!!

This one's a very despairing piece, but I think you've done a good job of expressing yourself.
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RiCterMan
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Posted: Sun Jul 17, 2005 11:32 pm Reply with quote

I agree. It reminds me of feelings I felt for a long time, but it's very good. I especially like the title. When I write, I usually try to come up with a very interesting title. I can honestly confess, I use a dictionary to come up with titles, now and then, and always, to come up with good substance in my wordings. Nice work! Cheers, you!

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Bullet41
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Posted: Mon Jul 18, 2005 7:21 am Reply with quote

Thanks dude i wrote this song for people who have this problems to know that they are not alone and when theres a problem they is always an answer
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sixtysecondminute
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 5:49 am Reply with quote

I agree with Ron; you do a very good job of portraying your emotions here.

I especially like the line - "This life is falling away from me"

Just a little pointer though... I think you might have gone a little over the top with your rhyme scheme.

I used to do it all the time when I was younger... and since I stopped, I have liked my lyrics alot better upon comparing them to what I had previously done.

Also, your grammars a little off... but that's irrelevant I guess Smile
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