unbroken_silence
ubw newbie
Joined: Mar 26, 2005
Location: I'm here..in this hellhole.
Posts: 9
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| Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2005 11:53 pm |
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I JUST finished these. Like 2 minutes ago. Damn. Took me a week to finish them. Anywho, comment on them please!!
Forever
I know you're running out of breath
And I hear the faint calling fo death
But nobody needs to know
No, no one will ever know
I hear your heart, it slows its pace
All color leaving your precious face
But nobody needs to know
No one will ever know
A love so sweet and pure
Is on worth dying for,
But you don't love me
Now you won't love anymore
I've been trying so hard to forget
What I did, though I'll not regret
But nobody needs to know
No, no one can ever know
A love so sweet and pure
Is on worth dying for
But you won't love me
Now you won't love anymore
Take these whispers to your grave
Now, dear my love, don't be afraid
No worries, only a small, sharp pain
Be brave, be brave
[whisper: I should have been the one you loved..]
A love so sweet and pure
Is one worth dying for
But you don't love me
Now you won't love anymore
A love so sweet and pure
Is one you're dying for
Now you'll soon love me
I'll love you forever more
I'll love you forever.. |
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RiCterMan
ubw luminary
Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
Posts: 742
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| Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2005 6:10 am |
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You win a compliment! Ok, sorry for the lame joke; I just couldn't help myself. I really like this one a lot. It's kind of simple, but it's very cool, none-the-less. You seem to have a way with words, more so than a lot of kids around your age. If I remember correctly, you said you were 13 or 14, but I can't be sure which is right. Anyway, I admire your persistence. I also have a decent amount of persistence, when I write, but you took a week to write this. That's impressive. Cheers, you!
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