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shanetelford
ubw newbie
Joined: Jan 04, 2005
Posts: 10
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| Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 4:21 pm |
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CRY AND CRUMBLE
I'm not meant to be strong
I'm not superman
And I'm not meant to be weak
Just because I can
I have problem
It's more than skin deep
I really miss you
And I can't get to sleep
I fall to pieces when you're not around
I cry and crumble
And I can't be found
I cry and crumble
But I'm not going down
These cheeks won't stay dry
Keep shedding the old blue
These tears are falling
They're falling for you
I have a problem
It's more than a word
I really need you
And loneliness hurts
I fall to pieces when you're not around
I cry and crumble
And I can't be found
I cry and crumble
But I'm not going down
I know that you'll save me
When things don't go right
I know that you'll save me
But why not tonight?
I fall to pieces when you're not around
I cry and crumble
And I can't be found
I cry and crumble
But I'm not going down |
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dirt
ubw newbie
Joined: Jul 07, 2005
Posts: 23
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| Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 3:19 pm |
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I like it!! especialy:
I fall to pieces when you're not around
I cry and crumble
And I can't be found
I cry and crumble
But I'm not going down
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sixtysecondminute
ubw rookie
Joined: May 27, 2005
Location: Solihull, UK
Posts: 186
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| Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 3:45 pm |
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| dirt wrote: | I like it!! especialy:
I fall to pieces when you're not around
I cry and crumble
And I can't be found
I cry and crumble
But I'm not going down
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I disagree... It seems like th words were chosen for the sole purpose of rhyming.
Take the line; "And I can't be found"
What does that mean? I'm sure in the context a meaning could be forced into mind... but it's not obvious, and it doesn't seem like it's a genuine feeling or emotion... more just a few words thrown together to rhyme with around.
Same with "But I'm not going down ". The phrase is just a cliche which little children or immature sports players say to each other to envoke intimidation. If you want to take it literally, 'going down' would mean to be upset (yes, and also a sexual referance... but that's irelivant). The previous lines quite clearly show that you, or the persona is upset; or down... and so this is quite clearly a contradiction of the line before it.
Do yourself a favour and don't try to rhyme unless it comes naturally. |
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