RiCterMan
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Location: Madison, OH
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| Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 11:49 pm |
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Hey guys,
This is yet another song I wrote, BUT..., this one is different, because it was composed the summer before last, about a year after I first started writing song lyrics. I posted this, because I got the idea from another thread, to show everyone an example (myself) of how most writers experience some pretty strong maturity after they've exercised their ability for an extended amount of time. I recently found this (incomplete)song, titled, "Before the Storm", and it's somewhat humorous. I didn't even come up with the title for it! My cousin came up with it! Anyway, here it is... Enjoy.....
"Before the Storm"
There is no place I'd rather be,
than here...
Peace is fulfilled in every moment.
It is crystal clear,
to stay here...
Beautiful is the state...
Beautiful is the state...
Mind is clear...
Full of cheer.
Chorus (?)
long and hard was the Sh-t.
Hard as hell- (this is where I stopped writing.)
Honestly, this made me laugh when I read back on it the first time after I found it again. To me, it appears a five year old attempted to write a song, and I'm not saying the way that I write now is genius, or anything, but really... -They seem to be a lot more artistic than this wonderful piece. I didn't even write down the actual words to the chorus! I just wrote Chorus on the paper.
I'm not likely to finish or rewrite this one, but if anyone feels the need, go ahead and leave some feedback. I don't even care if you bash this one to pieces, because I was 18 or 19 years old when I wrote it, and it looks very sad to me. I gaurantee there would be no offense taken.
Anybody else have earlier lyrics they wrote, which show how much they've matured? I'd like to see them, if you do have any, and you're cool with sharing them. This could be the thread for lyrics written during everyone's "early days," if you guys want it to be. That's all I've got to say, so have fun with this thread. That's why I posted it. Cheers to evolution!
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minusme
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Location: New York
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| Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2005 6:38 am |
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LOL... I totally agree about developing your writing over time. When I read some of my early stuff I just laugh to myself too. It's amazing how writing evolves as you get older and your mind gets better at expressing itself. Many of my first writings sound exactly like yours above!! I chuckled to myself as I read them, because of the similarities between them.
Thanks for sharing these!!! It's good to remember where we began to appreciate where we are now.... |
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RiCterMan
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Joined: Jun 10, 2005
Location: Madison, OH
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| Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2005 5:36 am |
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Thank you both.
Believe it or not this was a pretty big improvement from even earlier songs I wrote. Also, I think grunge is cool, but I wouldn't sing that way, because I like the sound I've acquired already. Like I said, I think grunge sounds cool, but my taste of music has an attraction to a different vocal sound. It ranges, but not a lot. Cheers!
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