Overflowing

Posted: Sat Jul 02, 2005 6:16 am

You treat me like your ashtray,
Somthing to put out your pain,
And when you're not smoking,
I'm not needed,
Back on the shelf I go,
But I know,
That you'll be needing me again soon,
And so I wait,
Like an idiot,

It's hard to empty myself,
I'm almost overflowing,
Sometimes your ashes burn me,
And there's nothing I can do,
The shiny surface of my mind,
Is now a tainted grey,
It won't come clean,
Even if you wanted to try,

Can't think of our second verse,
I don't know our story ends,
And now that youve quit smoking,
I'm not needed,
And on the shelf I'll stay,
Every day,
Wishing you'll be needing me again soon,
And so I wait,
Like an idiot,

It's hard to empty myself,
I'm almost overflowing,
Sometimes your ashes burn me,
And there's nothing I can do,
The shiny surface of my mind,
Is now a tainted grey,
It won't come clean,
Even if you wanted to try,

It's hard to empty myself,
It's hard to empty myself,
It's hard to empty myself,
I'm overflowing,

It's hard to empty myself,
I'm almost overflowing,
Sometimes your ashes burn me,
And there's nothing I can do,
The shiny surface of my mind,
Is now a tainted grey,
It won't come clean,
Even if you wanted to try,

Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 5:58 pm

I like the symbolism between smoking and you being the ashtray. Very nice the way you worked that into the song. The song is a bit more depressing than my usual taste, but it is certainly a good read. Well done!!!!

Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 10:02 pm

Tom, I didn't even read the song yet. But I wanted to let you know I'm gonna check it out tomorrow or the next day, and I'll be sure to comment. I just have to get the new song I wrote posted, and if I want to do it without having to restart my computer (it's very slow) I gotta hurry. Cheers, and more cheers, though!

RiCterMan

ubw rookie Joined: Jun 28, 2005 Posts: 133

hey man these lyrics are awesome. i love the smbolyism its great. how did you come up with the idea, its brilliant.
keep up the good work

Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 1:50 am

Tom,

I think you were born with part of your purpose, here on Earth, being to write song lyrics. Though it makes me want a cigarette again (yes, I know it's a bad habit), the medaphor is very nice. Great stuff, really!

Oh yeah... -Forgot to mention why I'm back. I finished writing a new song, and I felt compelled to come online when I was done. I figured I would just post this reply, as I indirectly promised ya earlier, before I went on my AIM buddy list. There's probably nobody there anyway, so I stopped here first.

One more thing: whoever's flicking their ashes on you, tell them some dude (me) found out, and that if they don't stop doin' that, he'll be on his way to blow some smoke in their face, among other things. -Just playin'. but people who use other people are cold as hell, and if you gain success in the near future, you should just be like, "ha ha ha, idiot...! Look who's been burned now...!" Whatever the case, you've got my support, even if it's only on this board. I gotta go for a sec', but excuse any stupidity in my reply. I've gotten around three hours of sleep within the last 45, so I'm a little dazed now. Cheers and music!

RiCterMan

Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 3:30 pm

ron:
I have writen far more depressing songs. The chorus melody I had in mind was actual quite upbeat (despite the lowbeat lyrical content)

RiCterMan:
Thank you for the opening comment. That made me chuckle... and made my day. (I've been having a shit day. A very shit day. My computer f**ked up and I lost a few months of lyrics. Luckily... I had found this place, and so had posted my favourite songs up)

I didn't actually write this song feeling angry at the person this was about. It's very complicated realy I guess.

hereafter:
I actually wrote the first 2 lines a long long time ago. The otherday I was sitting in my garden having a smoke... and remembered them. I then came in and wrote the rest of the song. I'm like that.

Posted: Thu Jul 14, 2005 12:40 am

Hey man, I can relate. Basically, if I don't restart my computer every so often, it freezes, and the risk of losing information that I've put time into, is there. I actually was working on somethin' one time, and then it was gone. Have you ever felt the urge to hurt something that doesn't even feel pain?? I haven't, but in time who knows what'll happen...? No..., those are jokes. Although, I am better at dealing with people trying to upset me, than I am with my computer stressing me out. I shouldn't complain, though. After all, I'm the one choosing to spend so much time on it.

Another thing: Believe it or not, many of my best lyrics were left at a past friend's apartment, only to have something happen the night I left. So, now they're still there (or thrown out) after around five months. -Not to mention about $250 worth of CD's, which had greater value to me than the dollar amount. But..., that's life. I can re-acquire the CD's if I need to, and I remember parts of the songs. I've written many more since then. I know it's impossible to replace the old ones, but some I can reinvent, and there will be many more to come. Alright... Cheers, Tom!

RiCterMan

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