"Symbolics" (lyrics)

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2005 12:29 pm

Hello again All,

This song seems to sound quite nice when I sing it, and visualize, in my head, the music behind it. It was inspired by Incubus’ song, “Aqueous Transmission”, but it will sound completely different, especially the second half of it. It’s basically a song about a rapid emotional change I just went through. I ended up seeing things that were, in a way, hidden before. You may all call this one, “Symbolics...”

"Symbolics"

Centered around,
and designed
to be seen with images
not in sight,

but still learned
by the thoughful,
and the wise...

(Chorus):
Hints and signs
are often undermined.
When we look to the obvious
it hides.

Take what is found,
and realized.
When you see those images
that hide

life is learned.
Though it's subtle
it's defined...

(2nd & last run Chorus)

(Long Interlude, not figured out yet)

(Sort of Long Bridge):
Somehow the bottle was shattered,
and swept away.

I was Blinded by the light I couldn't see.

Don't give in.
Don't you give in.
What's in plain view
can cover the truth
in the abstract.

The bottle may seem
to withstand with durability,
but that sound that you crave
is on the way...

It may just
shatter and be...
swept away... (stretched out and shifted vocally)

Hints and...
signs.

(Outro):
Centered around,
and designed
to be seen with images...
not in sight...

(EnD)

Well, that is the song, and somehow, it has nothing to do with alcohol. One last thing: This song is supposed to symbolize an epic journey. Ok, quick!! Reply! I’m very anxious to know what everyone thinks. Alright, I guess I’ll wait if you need to take time. But Thanks much, either way.

Cheers and a Smile!
RiCterMan

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2005 1:47 pm

Wow. These have a lot of emotion in them, the way I see them, and that's what I really like about them. I can't wait till you post some more!
unbroken_silence

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2005 2:56 pm

hey ub_silence,

Thanks much! I like to space the lyric posts out a bit, but I've written two more songs since this one. The first is called, "Lack of Oxygen", which I'm thinking I'm not going to post, but the second one is the one that I feel sounds/looks better. It's called, "The Reverie of Athena", and it's a nifty little piece, I think. I shall post that song after the next one, called, "Recollections", which I wrote two days ago. I decided to post "Symbolics", before the next, because it's a little more complex.

So, there's more to come, but if I post all the songs that I'm writing, it could get kind of irritating. I'm just in an intense flow currently. I love it, man! It feels great to create music, even if it is pretty constant. But you... You really need to keep writing, so that if you get in a flow like this, you can get with a band, and make things happen. You're good, man, but practice can aid in furthering your talent. Cheers to you!

RiCterMan

Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 3:37 am

It's harder to use longer words in your songs because the flow of the syllables has to match not only the rhythm of your song, but also the way your melody line rises and falls. You can't have the note rising at a part of the word where your normal inflection would be falling, unless you want to do that deliberately to make a point. But anyway. You're ambitious with your use of words, and that's a great thing.

If I had to make some constructive criticism (and I guess that's what this forum is for) then I'd say that the words are a little impersonal right now. The best way to talk about an idea is to make the listener feel connected to it in some way. Try to get yourself, or another person, involved in the lyrics in some way; you don't have to phrase it as if it's a story or a piece of speech, but try to put some personal angles in it so the impression is that it's coming from your soul, rather than an abstract thought. I know that's easier to say than to do - I'm still wrestling with it myself.

Of course, that may be totally inappropriate to the style of music you're writing! If it's a dance track, for example, abstract lyrics are absolutely fine. So take everything I said with a pinch of salt.

Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 7:43 am

Hey Cam,

It's coincidental that you mentioned that it's impersonal. I used to post on the IOV message boards (Incubus) a lot, and they got pretty annoyed with my lyrics. They said they were: 1) pseudo-intellectual, and difficult to understand. So, I have simplified my wordings a lot. 2) They also said I made my lyrics too much about me, so I actually have tried a lot more, to use less words, such as, "I" and "me", etc.

In "Symbolics", I used the word, "I" once, and if someone listened to this, (if it had music), they would have one of two things happen: They'd become so calm that sleep would be evoked, or they'd read into it, and see the message behind, which is the basis of the song's meaning.

But this one's supposed to be very, very light (violin+piccolo possibly), and a more abstract song than most. Though the second half is, seemingly, very intense when I sing it out loud. I showed a couple friends, and they loved it. It kinda' surprised me, but who knows...? Maybe it is a good piece (not saying that's for sure). Anyhow, Thanks much for your feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Cheers and a Smile!

RiCterMan

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