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andyliverpool
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Posted: Thu Jun 09, 2005 4:25 pm Reply with quote

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Trying to get out of the city


It won’t cost a lot but I know its dish of the day
When everybody sits down
I know its time to play
Thinking of a better day
Don’t say that thing you always say
Take in on the chin my friend

Psychedelic rainbows all around me in the sky
i told you that i didnt want to die
Psychedelic rainbows all around me in the sky
its just a case of get out of the city
dont want to be a celebrity

Its gets harder everyday
To talk to you about the pain we saw
why cant we just blow the pain away
It won’t cost a lot but you know it did
I guess am dish of the day


Psychedelic rainbows all around me in the sky
Know more drugs and power for me
Psychedelic rainbows all around me in the sky
Know more city people on my case
Just a guy who was once a celebrity


Psychedelic rainbows all around me in the sky
In the sky
In the sky
In the sky
In the sky
In the sky



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mysticmoonangel
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 7:02 am Reply with quote

hi andyliverpool

sounded very mumble jumble and not a whole lot of sence
the song leaves you a little confussed as to what is realy going on

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sixtysecondminute
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 7:44 am Reply with quote

no offense... but it read like it was written by a retarded chav on coke...
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hereafter
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Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2005 3:49 pm Reply with quote

hey, I think that if this song had great guitar riffs and sung the right way it could be very cool, but yeah it does read like it was written by a retard on coke, but sometimes thats a good thing
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