terminal disease

Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 5:34 am

First I must ask you to bear with me. Please do not rate the arrangement, neither my performance. I am not a musician, I just like writing lyrics, and every once in a while I also create a song and record it, so one might get an idea - it's the only way to preserve my ideas since I can't write notes.

So, it's the idea of the song I would like to lead your attention to, not my performance. I created "terminal disease" with a fictive, rather unknown band in mind, who might want to have a song in their repertoire the audience could sing along with. A song the audience probably has never heard before, but can sing along with anyway. That's the main idea, and that's the reason for the rather long outro. It's not meant as a typical studio song, i.e. hit material, but should carry the audience when performed live.

Obviously, the song must not be boring and should still maintain the qualities of any other good song. Well, what do you think ...

http://www.unsignedbandweb.com/music/play.php?mode=song_hifi&band_id=12553&song_id=29099

Thanks for your patience!

ubw rookie Joined: Sep 27, 2005 Posts: 147

okay, okay.

moderator Joined: Jun 30, 2007 Posts: 567

not bad music but title really remember me my winter badtrips :/ i'm glad i don't understand the lyrics cause i could have make nightmares cause of the guy with his dark k-way Razz

the music is nice i like it...sounds like 80's well formatted...rock for sure

Posted: Wed May 20, 2009 6:50 am

Thanks so far - and thanks also for the other two stand-alone reviews!

It's a pity Lodato deleted his original comments. They were quite original, and also quite correct as for my pretty rotten performance. I know how I sound, that's why I asked you to focus on the idea, i.e. structure, tune ...

An example: if you had to review Dylan's "Mr. Tambourine Man" you could listen to the Byrds or to the master himself. Depending on what you've listened to the reviews might differ largely. The song, though, would be the same. See what I mean?

Nonetheless, I am grateful also for hints on what could be improved in my recordings. Although I actually would prefer others to produce and perform my stuff.

Thanks again
Bernd

ubw rookie Joined: Sep 27, 2005 Posts: 147

I had to delete those comments. I wasn't being my better self and didn't agree with what I wrote. I always applaud originality and creativity where ever it comes from. I may dislike the tune and don't understand the words but appreciate your balls in asking for a review. On the other hand I wouldn't have the balls to compare myself with Dylan... Oops! There I go again. -Hey, all the best to you. -RL

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